Is my writing any good?
It's actually very good. Nice hook in the first line - a first sentence should always put a question in the reader's mind. You do that. You use a little too much description here and there though. A good rule of thumb is to never use more than one adjective to describe something, unless absolutely necessary. Also, adverbs are the devil ;) You can get away with using thrm every now and then, but not very often. I suggest going through and taking out all your description, and seeing how it looks. Then from there, adding in description that you feel is necessary. You have a lot of promise, though. Keep writing. P.S. A post above mine said to get it published. Now this is on Y!A it is already self published, and no magazine will take it on. Be sure to write something else, though! And don't post anything online that you ever want to submit for publication!
Is my writing any good or do I suck?
So basically, I am interested in writing, mainly something like Science-fiction. But I feel like I am not such a good writer. I've received plenty of compliments, for an example: "Oh, you write so well! You're probably the best writer I know!" which my best friend said a while ago. While my teacher said that I have great potential and that I should allow my talent to unfurl. Yet, I don't feel like a good writer. I have many, many ideas, but I never have the energy to finish them, I suppose my attention span is that short. I'll show you an example of my writing: "She gritted her pearly white teeth as she ran the cold blade across her pale wrist. A hiss of pain was quickly replaced with a satisfied sigh as the endorphin kicked in. She watched as beads of blood slowly seeped from the wound she acquired only a moment ago and finally transforming into a trail of the dark crimson liquid she saw pouring from her wounds every day. “Sally?” A heavy knock on the bathroom door brought her back to reality. The blonde called Sally stared momentarily at the door and then looked at the tiled floor as she heard drops of her own blood explode when they hit the ground. “Sally, can you hear me?” Her brother's thin voice sounded worried, he once walked in on her cutting herself and forced her to see a psychologist. It worked, for a short period of time, but Sally couldn't handle leaving her addiction so she kept carving her arm, of course keeping it a secret from her brother Bruce. “Yeah,” She paused for a moment. “Just a sec', coming out.” Quickly, she wrapped a bandage around her wrist, halting the blood flow for a bit. She washed the knife and hid it in its usual place, underneath the sink. She knew it was only a matter of time before Bruce would discover it there, but she would have to chew that food later. She came face to face with her tall older brother as she opened the worn door. He was tall enough for Sally to have to stand on her tip toes to give him a peck on the cheek. “Phew,” He breathed, “You had me kind of worrying there for a second.” He chuckled and bent slightly to wrap his strong arms around his smaller little sister." How does that sound? I know it's pretty far-fetched to seek answers from strangers on the internet, but it's really the only option. I am ready to accept critiques.
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Is my creative writing introduction any good?
---Your style of writing is *very* interesting, but you use too many adjectives. You must try to find a way to describe things with fewer adjectives. Less is more, as they say! Here, let me give you an example (I use this example for everything already): Instead of saying, "His face was a bright cherry red," you could say, "His face was as red as a bee sting". From the words, "bee sting", you can infer that the the skin on his face is tender/raw looking. It is a connection that will help the reader get better imagery. This principle is the "show, don't tell" principle. This may go along with describing actions, not just objects/setting. Instead of "She ran upstairs and tripped on each step" you could say, "She ran upstairs and her face kept coming eye level with each step as she tripped". Let me just say, these are not perfect examples, but at least you will not what I mean. Anyway, I think the number of adjectives is stopping this from flowing. If you can minimize the use of adjectives and "show" more, I think this would be a smooth read and this would be a rather fantastic piece. I think the majority of your adjective problem is in your first paragraph. ---Another thing... you have 2 very large paragraphs condensed together. You want to try and break them apart so it flows better. Different scenes need different paragraphs. ---Lastly, remember to be concise. Don't add in unnecessary words - such as in "I rounded up my herd and proceeded to relieve the babysitter of her duties" When you say "relieve" the babysitter, the reader will assume the character is relieving her from her duties. So "of her duties is unnecessary". ---I am intrigued by a lot of choices of words here. Keep up the writing. You have tremendous potential!