What do you think of these song lyrics I wrote?
I've been writing songs, this one is called "Forever Shining" here are the lyrics: Do you shine? do you bright? do you far? where you are? where's your mom? where's your dad? come on over here and listen to the fad, did your friend? did your dad? did your sister? back then in the old days we said don't don't don't do do that because shining is for kids who said that? lets all adventure on the next high way, do you shine? do you far tell me where you really are? i'm a car your on mars now we're far, let's laugh at time, laugh at grace from where we are so let's just shine.
Do you like this song I wrote?
haha that's really funny =]
Wrote this rap what do you think?
It's aight.
What do you think of this song i wrote?
so i've written better,which is why i'm not sure wat i think about this one... any suggestions? The Game Travel the boards to the next space Back a few up a few, always in last place. The game we call life isn’t fun anymore. As I keep losing, more and more and more. Here it goes again, ditched and forgotten Like so many before me, I’m just dropping Into a black hole, where no one will find me Well I’m done. Done with the hurt and abuse That you always put me through. I ran out of money, I lost my home I hate this game and I’m all alone. Travel the boards to the next space Back a few up a few, always in last place. The game we call life isn’t fun anymore. As I keep losing, more and more and more. Trying so hard, to make it through. I don’t even know if I’ll make it too… The end when I’m supposed to go If this is life then how do we get out? That’s why I’m done. Done with the jeers I hear everyday. Done with the “friends” who one day will pay For the hurt and pain they caused me That will one day be the death of me. Travel the boards to the next space Back a few up a few, always in last place. The game we call life isn’t fun anymore. As I keep losing, more and more and more. Travel the boards to the next space Back a few up a few, always in last place. The game we call life isn’t fun anymore. As I keep losing, more and more …. and more.
A poem about Saudi Arabia I just wrote, what do you think?
The Land Of The Golden Sun i come from a land with little rain.. a harsh climate and a rough terrain.. deserts spread as far as the eye can see.. so scorching and dead, with not a single tree. hot and dry year-round, snow has never landed. i call home, a land which life has abandoned. i was born and raised here, the weather gives me no effect. fat cats paying a visit will always regret. coming for oil but fleeing before they drown in sweat. the sun shines ever so bright and strong.. in the land of the golden sun, in which i belong~ n.n sorry for my weak English.. but what do you think?