Can you tell me if this is a good essay for a compare and contrast paper?
During our global history there have been many revolutions, and wars. Two revolutions in particular are incredibly important the American and French revolutions. Both the American and the French revolutions are comparable in that both originated from unfair taxes and social standings, in contrast however, the French revolution was much more devastating since the French fighting for complete freedom so they would kill anyone opposing them, while the Americans were fighting for fair representation only causing them to be much less brutal. Ultimately though, both eventually got their desired results it is only in the way they obtained them that it matters. The American and French revolutions are similar in that both originated from unfair taxes. In America they were all of a sudden being taxed by Great Britain, who wanted America to contribute to them as one of their colonies. While the French fought because there was a class system, and in this system there was an upper and lower class. The way it worked was, the upper class would not be taxed, while the lower class was given the burden of supporting the country, something in their eyes that seemed unfair. This also signifies that both were being mistreated, in that they were not receiving proper representation. Both revolutions also went about achieving their revolutions differently. While the Americans were cultured states man, and had no interest in fighting a bloody war and only sought proper representation. On the other hand the French were not nearly as cultured, they were the lower class and they were tired of it. So tired of it that anyone who stood in there way would be annulated. This of course led to one of the bloodiest revolutions in human history. In the end both revolutions eventually got what they desired. Though some may be similar, or the complete opposite, they certainly had common quality’s as well as contrasting subjects. But however different, or similar, both are now a part of history and will be remember for many years to come. In conclusion both the American and French revolutions are certainly amazing subjects. Please rate on a scale of 1-10 :)
Can you read my essay and tell me if its good?
Could use some car chases and there is no sex or violence in it. Also a couple of jokes would be good. What it really needs though is a hero. Every good story has a hero and some sort of task to overcome that challenges him to the limit but ultimately leaves him (or her) a better person for it. It's a good start though. Perhaps the hero is on the beach somewhere? Keep at it good stuff, needs more explosions and girls in bikinis. Perhaps you could lift the whole tone of it by setting it in summer. That way you would be able to avoid all the cold, depressing imagery. Also there should be a girl called "Cody" in it somewhere.
Can anyone tell me how this essay sounds so far?
Hey! I like wut ur saying in your essay, and have a few suggestions. There are some really good things, and some things that need help. I hope my suggestions help! In your first sentence, "The power and sense of safety that comes from false charges apply only as long as the “witch hunt” continues," the word "comes" should be changed to "come" in order to agree with the subject of the sentence, which is "power and sense of safety..." Also, in the first paragraph, your point is not very clear. Since you are using this text to talk about the effects of false charges, this should be made more clear. You jump right in with the salem girls, and dont really give an explanation of them or y u r using them as the example. The point of your essay should b written b4 you bring in the girls, so the reader isn't confused. And you can do both of these in your introductory paragraph. Your first sentence is an excellent way to say what you are saying, but it doesn't belong in the beginning. You can keep that sentence with that wording, just place it differently. One possible sentence could b something like......"We will look at the "witch girls" in The Crucible to show the harmful effects of false accusations..." or something to that extent. I hope Ive been of some help. Good luck!
Hi, Malick. Sorry I didn't see this before, since I assume you have deadlines. Your teacher gave you some good ideas, but s/he was thinking of areas of criminology, which makes since, since that's how it's taught.Let's look at this the other way: look at what people are debating that relates to criminology.Here's a government publication which definitely hits on some of the points your teacher did: https://www.ncjrs.gov/pdffiles/1... . And here's an essay which explores issues in criminology: IDEOLOGY AND CRIMINAL JUSTICE POLICY: SOME CURRENT ISSUES Oddly, picking a topic requires research; you don't just research after you've picked one. You want to know what the arguments are in the field already. Later in the semester, you probably would; as it is, you've had some class, but not the whole thing.Try googling phrases which might be interesting "women prisoners" say, or "trends in capital punishment." See what they offer, skim some accessible results, and try to figure out which actually resonate with you. Criminal justice is about people, after all: people as victims, people as perpetrators, people as survivors. How should we balance everyone's needs? Or is there an absolute standard: once you cross social lines, should you be just put away?The secret is to find an issue you want to know more about. Just taking on a topic because it's suggested is a waste of your time -- and probably will produce a boring paper. There are big issues in local and national these days, on how to reform the prison system. Obama just made an order that teens cannot be kept in solitary confinement. Do you know why? Two presidential candidates have said the system must be reformed. If you're interested in politics, you might compare the different recommendations and discuss their impact, and which might work or fail spectacularly.In short, learn a little about current social justice issues as they relate to criminology, and then pick which one you want to learn more about.Good luck! If you have follow-up questions, as always I'm available to ask in comments.
Can someone please tell me if you think this is a good essay, and what you think I should title it?
I have a few critiques: The essay's structure is repetitive and is very informal. In addition, don't be afraid to appeal to sensory details. For example, "We also had to wear stupid uniforms." Instead of that, how about this: The school forced us to wear bland uniforms that made me want to pour oil on it and set it aflame. Make me FEEL your spite! Don't just state "I hated the uniform." Now who wants to read that? Now, I'm not a good writer, so I feel as if I shouldn't be giving you advice, but I'm positive that good writing takes practice and hard work. Keep working towards your goal and you'll do fine. Don't sweat the small stuff.
Can someone read my essay and tell me if it's good?
I read through it and here are my recommendations First of all, I don't care much for the first sentence, you're basically saying "It was interesting." The first sentence should really grab the reader's attention so they'll want to read the rest of the essay You need some kind of transition b/tw the 1st and 2nd paragraphs...one second you're talking about the quality of the food and then the next you're talking about a summer evening Watch for repetiton...I noticed that you said "There was" at least five times. Watch capitalization!...I noticed some words were capitalized that shouldn't be..."At First, we thought we had chosen..." and "The Soft music that was playing..." "My hand had met a sticky surface that I could not identify with."---You will need to reword this sentence, a sentence isn't supposed to end in "with"...actually my advice would be just to remove the "with" at the end, then the sentence would be fine One time you said mouse trap and another time you called it mouse pad...I have personally never heard the term "mouse pad" so if I was you I think I'd just keep calling it a mouse trap. "The waiter came back and took our orders, and I while he was talking..." Be sure to remove the extra I "None of this sounded very good, we all decided that the safest thing would be the Sardis club which was a sandwich made with turkey lettuce and tomato served with French fries on the side, for 18.75" Double check the punctuation in this sentence "For nearly 20.00, the sandwich was not worth it." For this sentence, I would change "it" to "the price." You want to avoid saying "it" as much as you can, be more precise rather than just saying "it" Make sure you have a good ending that sums up everything you've said WITHOUT repeating yourself. Good essay...I can't imagine being in a restaurant and ending up with a mouse trap on myself!
I don’t know if I can be helpful, but I would say that fiction can only reach as far as the wildest imagination of the mind. Whereas as truth has the entire Universe to play with; it does not need “imagination” as we, the Universe is The Reality, and it is boundless. It is going to be infinitely stranger than our little attempts at fiction. It is going to blow our “minds”, except by then, our minds won’t even be present, and it will only be our essence, but nevertheless… Stranger, more magnificent and inconceivable, unbelievable… if we knew it, we would have fits of ecstasy that could make our beautiful hearts stop beating. This is no hyperbole.Good luck with your essay!
Can anyone tell me how to write a good introduction for an essay?
I always start by writing the introduction paragraph backwards. What is the topic of the essay you're about to write? That will be the final sentence. Why is the topic important? What does it mean to me or others? Lets say you're writing an essay about how if you agree or disagree that the social structure in Lord of the Flies is similar to your own. You would first start out by briefly describing the social structure in the book, and how it descended into a madness. You would then end the paragraph by stating your view- the topic for the essay.
I did attend the placement drive of Capgemini and there were several rounds starting from online aptitude and essay writing, then there were couple of technical rounds and finally HR round at their office. Though the topics were different for everyone but they were very general. There are some topics to which i have mentioned the links below,Reservation in Higher EducationOnline shopping vs Normal shoppingEssay Writing Topic : DIGITAL INDIAHard work or Smart work - Which is important?