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Well to start, there are a few spelling errors that impede my understanding of the poem: "Mumbling sence" ---> perhaps 'sense'? "I am the queen of critizatation" ---> perhaps 'criticism'? To begin at the beginning, the line "I am undecided." seems at odds with the rest of the poem. The speaker seems unrepentant about the wrongs they commit, declaring themselves to be the source of the listed evils, and yet they begin the poem with indecision? It seems that the speaker knows precisely who and what she is! Next, you have 5 stanzas of obscure images. Some of them are better than others, but I think your point could be better made with some more concrete examples of evil. Take for example this song by the group 'Voltaire' "I'm the fly in your soup I'm the pebble in your shoe I'm the demon in your bed I'm a bump on every head I'm the peel on which you slip I'm a pin in every hip" Now, this group is 'showing' rather than 'telling'; the listener recognizes these things as uncomfortable and bad, and they create their own emotional response as a result. You tend to list the feelings you want the reader to understand, like "Tangling your thoughts". Instead, why not think of a situation where your thoughts were tangled; chances on a reader would have a more dramatic response to such an image. Finally, you write "I am Hate" at the end of the poem. To be honest, the images you listed were more 'evil' than 'hate'. Your speaker seems to insight random misery, but there is no indication that she does this BECAUSE she hates people, nor does she sew hate. Either exclude this line, or explain how your speaker hates. All and all, a lot of interesting ideas but there is a great need for polishing and development. Generally spelling errors are an indication that an author has not looked over their work with the magnifying glass needed for good critique.
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You surely have a thing for poems! :DBrother, the poem is fair enough to justify your abilities in composing one. But, here is my simple honest advice...Brother, you can use a blend of 2 different rhyme schemes, rather than a using a minimum of one. You have undoubtedly used: "aaaa" "abba" and "aabb" types, but maintain an equality in distribution. By that I would mean, inspire of using different rhyme schemes differently, merge them and make it sound phonetically lyrical and rhythmic too!Above all... Post more poems !! Grazie.. :)
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Interpretation of poetry is subjective and so is its criticism. Objective analysis of poems isn't that simple. You must always keep that in mind. Here are some things you may improve upon according to me:Try replacing "For one" and "While for one" with constructs that don't look forced. They seem to be there for alliteration, but the effect doesn't quite come out.Your poem lacks rhyme or flow. It is stilted. Rhyme is not necessary in a poem. Free verse is a type of poetry that doesn't limit the theme by rhyming. In order to write free verse, one needs to master the flow in one's words. There must be a thought or emotion that generates flow. Careful wordplay helps in achieving that. Rhyme or flow may not be necessary, but that's what separates verse from prose. I feel the word Sisyphean stands awkwardly among other seemingly average words. It may be good to use rare words in poetry, but sometimes it makes the poem look more sophisticated or complicated than it actually is. Word usage also depends on the audience for your poetry.I like your theme. The imagination is strong and powerful. You have a creative mind. You just have to write more poetry. It will improve you. Always remember that proficiency in poetry difficult to validate and you need someone who can analyse your poems without any personal bias.Good luck.
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It took me literally 1 minute. An apple just hit me, it fell from a tree, the idea just struck me, id call it gravity, a guy name Issac Newton sat on this grass, picking up fallen apples, and scratching his ***.
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here it is made by kristina douskos:) troy how i love you when you tell jokes and how you like to drink some coke troy o troy i like your eyes i think the are sharper than mine how you sit next to me in music class i never want you to wear a cast because i care and i cant stop to stare because your worth it because I love you i would thow you in a pit of love i will never move because i love you and i hope you love me too <3Kristina Douskos<3 I thought of you today, But thats is nothing new. I thaought of you yesterday and the day before that too for every day, no matter where In my you will be there... Today tomorrow, my whole life though I will never stop loveing you! <3kristina douskos<3 thank you very much 4 reading p.s Troy is my crush<3
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i knnow it nothing great im new 2 writting poetry and i know my gramar is poor but please tell me what u think also the 5th part of the poem do u think i should take out or leave it the way it is?? Unwanted Evil Lies in my Soul I cant take this no longer I must be set free run away from your problems this cannot be me; Cant even look myself in the eye wait who am I? My mind draws a blank I cant answer this question, I look deep into my soul pay close attention; Pity and sorrow is all I have left, I seem to have lost all good and only evil I kept. Its pitch black with a whole in my heart, that is why my life has fallen apart; I have no love to receive or give, this hatred inside of me must not live. I must put an end to such hate, I have to change I can no longer wait; We all make mistakes I realize that now I want to be happy but I don't know how. You know how but it wont be easy for it lies deep inside of you, start by doing good and work hard for what I am writing is true; It is way easier to feel sorry for yourself and say life's not fair, but as you can tell that has gotten you no where. To actually work hard is difficult and boring, but the long term end result I assure you will be most rewarding; I look into my eyes again but this time I see a spark, my heart is starting to fill with love but it has left a mark; I will not forget my sorrow and pain, it has made me stronger that is what I have gained.
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I thought the poem was very good in a cute way! I was smiling as I read it! ***The feeling of the poem was clear, and to me, getting that across is the most important ingredient of a poem.***The singsonginess of it is kind of fun. I don't know what classification of poetry this is but I've seen it before. It almost reminds me of the teaching stories of Dr. Seuss! As far as rhyming goes, you did well! You would have hit it on the nailhead if you used "pursuit" at the end! To me, poetry is about expressing feelings, and if it did that for you, then it has done its job. If someone reads it and it expresses their feelings as well, then you have done a service to them and your poem has succeeded even more. If it resonates with many people, then that's how it becomes famous, because it becomes beloved. That's why I think all poems should go out into the public - because you never know who it is going to resonate with! All poetry is inspired. It comes from some secret place inside of us. When we work at a poem, we become crafters of this inspirational stream that we all have. Some of us are better crafters than others. Those that work hard at this task should be honored because they are trying to express for all of us. You were clearly inspired when you wrote this, and it could be made better by more crafting. But this may not be your intent. It may just stand well as it is for that moment in time for you. In scoring, I give you a 20 for effort, a 19 for emotional content, an 18 for rhyming, and a 15 for polish. Please keep writing poetry when you feel the inspiration! You could do very well!Edit: I see that you have reworked your poem some! I'm very impressed! The rhyming is more fluent now, and some of the punctuation changes really add to the tempo of the poem. Great job! Isn't it fun working and reworking a poem?!? It's like a potter working with clay... molding and shaping. Keep on writing!
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Aaah. So sweet. Very cute. Suggestions and criticism: - There were a few spelling issues, etc, but nothing too serious in my opinion. - I wouldn't have written it as a poem. Rather write it as a short story in a poetic style. I think a short poetic piece would be much better because it would suit your target audience. Well done :)
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10, simply because it is so beautiful, and it reminds me of the innocence long since swept away by the world. Really, this short story actually made me cry. I never got to enjoy this childhood, my parents told me straight that santa was a lie, and I already saw all the hate out lives can have, but this poem reminds me of all the love we could have. It reminds me of a short memo written someplace called, if the world was like Kindergarten. Where everyone shared, never fight, don't take what's not yours, and share the biggest most important word, LOOK!!!! thank you so much for this awesome poem, it really touched me.....