Can you read these two paragraphs and tell me if anything is wrong with it?
Okay, I have this essay that is due tomorrow for my english 3 teacher and I've only written an introductory paragraph and a few sentences of a second paragraph and I can't think of anything else because I think that the paragraph is kind of messed up. Can you please read it and tell me if I have any mistakes? Here is my topic: Your teacher has given you an assignment to write an informative essay. Think about someone you would like to talk to. Write about why you want to talk to this person. Be sure to explain you reasons with details. There are many people that I would like to talk to, but one person that stands out the most would be my late grandfather. He died from heart failure when my dad was eight years old. Which meant that my dad had little memory of him. When I came along, I didn't know about him at all until I was in the sixth grade, when I found out that the person that I thought was my grandfather wasn't. When this happened, I began to ask my grandmother about him and she told me very interesting information. As the years went by and I asked more questions, I learned even more things about him. Since I know some things about him, I wish I could talk to him in person to get to know him better. Talking to my grandfather would be like making up lost times. I can actually see what it's like to have another grandparent in my life as much as him seeing how it is to have a granddaughter. I can get to know certain things like his favorite color, his hobbies, and his dreams that he wanted to fulfill. That's all I have for right now but can you tell me how it sounds for right now and tell me the mistakes that I made and give me some tips that I can use to finish my essay. Thank you.
Can you Please Check Spelling For Mistakes?
1. Never say, "In the text is says..." And definitely don't use the same phrase as many times as you did. You need to have variety. 2. Never say, "As you can see..." Just say what you have to say. Keep it simple, and to the point. 3. change "lady" to "woman." 4. Use quotes sparingly. Only one of the six quotes in your paper is warranted. Don't quote something, and explain it after the fact. To use a quote correctly, first make your point, then add your quote to prove your point. 5. There are numerous run-on sentences. 6. After reading this, I still have no idea what the book is about. You are very vague. Your first paragraph (intro) should give a short summary of the plot, as well as lay out your three main points. 7. The comparison to 'The Boy Who Cried Wolf' is weak. I don't get how it's similar. 8. As for the example using 'Cinderella'... People know what that story is about. You don't have to explain it in detail. Simply say, "She was like Cinderella's step sisters because she let everyone else do her work for her." 9. There should be 5 paragraphs in your essay. A. Introduction. See #6, above. B. Talk about her bargaining. Give at least 3 supporting examples. Not necessarily quotes. Explain things in your own words. C. Talk about her being mean. Give at least 3 supporting examples. Explain things in your own words. D. Talk about her being dishonest. Give at least 3 supporting examples. Explain things in your own words. E. Conclusion. Remind your readers of what they have read by mentioning your 3 main points again, as well as your thesis. 10. Scrap this, and start from scratch. I'm sorry to be so harsh, but you did ask, and I want you to do well or I wouldn't be trying to help.
Can you read my paragraph on experimental error and tell me if i have any mistakes, or if somtin shuld change?
While performing the experiment, there where a few experimental sources of error which prevented us from hitting our target. One of these experimental sources of error was air resistance. While calculating the amount which our spring had to be extended, we ignored air resistance. Even though air resistance is very small in the class room, it still opposes the motion of our spring. By crossing out friction in our conservation of energy formula, the formula for speed which we created becomes incorrect, which causes all of our other calculations afterwards to become inaccurate. Since we shot our spring with the mindset that there is no air resistance, we missed our target because air resistance was present in the classroom even tough it was very small. The second experimental source of error in this lab was the materials used. The equipment used in the lab had a limited amount of units; therefore there was no way for our calculations to be exact. For example, the ruler which we used to measure our springs extension had millimeters as its lowest unit. This caused us to end our measurements with millimeters as our lowest unit. Since this measurement is rounded and is not exact, the k values which we calculate will also be inaccurate. Another piece of equipment which had limited units was the scale. When we measured the mass of the spring, the scale only showed digits two decimal units to the right. This means that the scale rounded our mass, making it an inexact value. Since we used an inexact mass to solve for x, the final answer which we obtained was not accurate, which caused us to miss our target. Another factor which accounted for the percentage error was human error. Without the use of machines, it is basically impossible to shoot our spring exactly the way which our calculations indicated. The setup of the experiment was not perfectly exact, and there really wasn’t an exact spot which we had to shoot our spring at. A little angle difference our curve in the wrong the direction causes you to miss you target. Do to limitations of the human eye; it was also very difficult to stretch your string at the exact value which you calculated. Therefore it is very difficult to hit the target because without machines, it is very difficult to setup and perform the experiment in the exact manner which our calculations indicated.
Help!? Can you check my body paragraph for my essay? I feel it is a bit long, how would I write it to make it smooth and more precise?
If there are some grammar mistake, can you tell me the correct way to write it? The Sunderlands let their daughter follow her dream because they wanted their daughter to be happy. Abby was attempting to pursue what her brother achieved, her brother, Zac successfully sailed solo alone around the world. The Sunderlands believe that if their son could do it, their daughter could do it too. The Sunderlands are raising competitive and talented children and the Sunderland believe that they could use their talent to reach their dreams. On Bruce Barcott Article says, “…they were hardly the worst parents in the world”. If the Sunderland were irresponsible they were not going to make Abby prepared and planned for her voyage. There are other parents who are too guarded to their children and their kids end up without knowing what the real adventure feel is like.
How can I learn to write grammatically correct English? What are some books or video lectures that will help me improve?
It is necessary that the basic “structure” of sentences be studied.Most native speakers learn this without studying grammar.The process of memorizing sentences from the time we are small children teaches us how to think continually in terms of basic sentence structure.Nursery Rhymes show us things like:Hickory dickory dockThe mouse ran up the clock.The clock struck one,The mouse ran downHickory Dickory Dock.If you study the Subject———Verb——-Object pattern, you will memorize how to think, write, and speak in terms of basic grammatical structure.The mouse (subject) ran (verb) up the clock (object)An Internet search using the following search termsSubject + Verb + -Objecteither alone or with the term + sentenceswill show you many websites about how to create basic sentences.The following is an example of one such website:Basic Word Order in English: SVO (Subject-Verb-Object)Such websites show how to create sentences with other elements.
Who can somone explain the detailed part of paragraph and method of paragraph development?
All of writing well in English is breaking things up. There, I made that one sentence into a paragraph of its own in order to give it emphasis. One rule about paragraphs: if you want to emphasize, keep them short. They have more impact. Just as punctuation breaks up sentences, and with the period breaks paragraphs up into sentences, so the white space between paragraphs creates a division to be used by the author for clarity. Just as a short paragraph has more impact, a short sentence has more impact. You know it's true. When you begin a paragraph, you should already know the basic thought it is meant to convey. Building a paragraph is like building a sandwich. Start with the "bread" of introduction, which tells what your point will be. Then put the meat in the middle, where you spice it up with facts and examples to illustrate your point. Finally, summarize or "cover" it with another piece of "bread," in the form of the punch line or "kicker." Building a paragraph is like building a sandwich.
Are there mistakes in my short answers to those astronomy questions?
Do you have a mental problem? These are not short answers. Not only that, but you repeat yourself. Can't you read? They are full of mistakes, far too many to itemize. Earth's atmosphere keeps the Earth warm? LMFAO To name a few problems: 1. Hydrogen doesn't condense (except under ultrahigh pressure) your explanation fails. It is volatility that drives the lighter gasses further out (as the proto-sun begins to burn) and it is gravity that collects the materials at a given distance. Both need to be mentioned in any explanation. 2. You seriously believe that 14 pounds/ in² of a gas film on the surface of a body prevents heat loss? Wow! The moon does have lobate scarps. The Earth has tectonic plates which accommodate the shrinkage differently than Mercury or Luna. You are completely wrong on this one. F. 3. Encke gap is "produced" by the ...passage... That's as good as you can do? Wow! Have you ever heard of the word "gravity"? It seems you have not. *sigh* The orbits ...from the Sun are in... The SUN ?!?!? What TF are you babbling about? The orbits are around the planet, not its star. The Cassinni Division is a clearer exemplar of an orbital Resonance than Huygens.