Critique Haiku Please???????????
I like the images! It evokes, which is exactly what a Haiku is meant to do. The only thing I would suggest is use your words a bit more wisely. You only have 17 syllables to work with. Do you really want to use them up on adjectives like "warm" and "slowly"? Poetry must always be pithy, but no form calls as loudly for concrete words as Haiku. Readers of Haiku want an image that's so unique, it lingers in their mind's eye like a painting. The last line is, in my opinion, perfect. It's simple and deep... very Haiku.
Poem: Shadow Cat - please critique, don't rewrite. I need you opinion for my improvement.?
In this case, I don't want the poem to be gender neutral; the fangs red with blood --- in my imagination -- are also fingernails sharp and painted red. The panther on the prowl is the woman also on the prowl; both seeking conquests. The panther's jungle is green and verdant, the woman's is concrete. It is also a poem of transmogrification -- an animal reborn as a human; this is one form of the India philosophy of reincarnation. That is part of the depth of the poem -- the part that my family doesn't care for or understand. Yet, it is something I feel so strongly in my body, that I must sing it's praises through my poetry. The panther is in much of my work in many ways. And so, when I say, "I am what you became..." I feel this so keenly that is probably what gives the poem its power. Thank you so much. Thank you all for your praises. Writers, by the very act of sharing their work, put themselves out there for ridicule or enjoyment -- I prefer the latter.
What should I write on employee comments after my performance review at work?
You shouldn’t feel obligated to write anything here. If you are in general agreement with what’s listed in your review, you can just leave this area blank. If there are additional items you’d like noted; e.g, accomplishments that might not have been recognized but that you feel proud of, you can do that here. Conversely, if there are specific items in your review that you’d like to rebut, this might be the place to do it, assuming your company has a process for this.
Haiku ideas please? Rain and sunshine?
So, I dont get the whole five seven five syllables. When i read some exapmles, it looks like there is not a pattern of five seven five. I need to write one poem on rain, and the other on sun. Thanks!
There’s a common piece of advice that if you want to improve your writing, you write more. How does one personally maximize the effect of this reality?
That’s a fantastic question and I rarely see it addressed.You’re right. People just say “write more”. That’s vague and a cop out. People really want to know how to become better writers.Writing is incredibly rewarding and can be lucrative as well once you get to a certain point.Here’s how to make the best use of this practice time.Get people to read your work and give feedback.Join groups where people swap and comment on the writing of others.Read your writing out loud. If you stumble even slightly or give a wrong inflection re-write it.Use Hemmingway app. It tells you how readable your text is. It suggests sentences that are hard to read. You can then break them up. It also spots passive text. You can often change it to active to make a more impactful piece.Read as much as you write. You’re sub-consciously absorbing their writing style and techniques. Without realising it, you’ll start applying things that your sub-conscious learned in terms of flow, language usage, etc. If you want to write in a certain style, read more of that style.Use a text analyzer . It will show you how frequently you use certain words or expressions. Exceptional writers have extensive vocabs and can always find the right word for the right audience off the top of their head. People who are still learning often use repetitive words and expressions. You can use this tool to start breaking some bad habits.Realize that writing is always a work in progress. Writing more helps you improve because there is always room to improve. Don’t be too hard on your writing. Instead, look for growth opportunities and leverage them to become a better writer.You might also find these article very helpful in your endeavorsHow to Defeat Writer’s Block Once & For All3 Data-Driven Steps to Create More Shareable Content (Slideshow)How to Start a Traffic-Generating Blog in 9 Essential Steps
Is this a proper way to write a poem?
Proper in what context? The only thing “proper” about poetry is if you are writing a certain style that has specific rules you follow (i.e. Haiku, Acrostic, Sonnet)…This is a free-form poem that is acceptable by today’s standards - in other words, there are no real rules…Free form is generally non-metered and non-rhyming and does not capitalize at the beginning of each line, etc…Now, you posted this previously asking for comments, correct? I could tell you lots about this poem, but a public forum is not the proper way to give a critique, so beware of that which you ask…You should (IMO) request as much by a PM, or better yet, join a poetry website and freely get and give critiques of works done by you and by others at the site…