What another way to say the phone is ringing, in a short story?
A sudden succession of shrill rings cut the silence. Andy jumped up startled. Peering toward the phone, he hesitantly picked it up. Well...if you use mine, you'd have to use other ways to imply that the rings come from the phone. Using descriptive words works! You can try adding in metaphors too. Ex. The sudden rings from the phone sounded like gunshots, causing Andy to jump up startled.
Where can I post my writings (short stories, poetry, etc.) online for other people to read and critique? I have a website/"blog," but I can't get much traffic to it .
There are so many options to enjoy reading and writing!My personal favorites are Commaful, Wattpad and Archive of Our Own, but here are my pros and cons of all of them. All of these are free.CommafulGorgeous visuals and layouts. The stories really come to life in a different way and looks incredibleBest chat system and feed of the fanfiction and writing sites - strong fan community engagementStill really new and very small library of works compared to other sites, but as a result easier to grow early audiences if it’s your first time postingArchive Of Our Own (AO3)Huge library of stories, usually higher quality worksmostly fanfictionIncredibly detailed searching systemCan be a bit intimidating to use if you’re new to fanfictionWattpadI’m personally a huge Wattpad fan for original fiction. I think it’s the best place to post longer form novels.Search function is very clunky. Hard to find works that I like in fanfiction in particularHuge potential audience and pretty sizable libraryFanfiction.netA bit easier to use than AO3, huge library of workspretty much all fanfictionbasic messaging system that AO3 doesn’t haveMediuman amazing place to share more thought piece related works. political ideas, tech ideas etc.HUGE audience and library, if your work goes viral, it really goes viralTumblrNot just for fanfiction and writing; it’s a great way to get connected with the entire fandom. You’ll find memes, fan art, and fanfictionGreat place to promote fanfiction and get readersVery tight communities around any fandom you can think ofQuotevSadly, these days, Quotev doesn’t get as much use for writing. Still quite popular for quizzes, roleplaying, and other thingsGreat chat systemI’d recommend trying out all of these and see which ones you like.From the posting side, I recommend Commaful for shorter works and AO3 for longer and more advanced works.
How can you describe a gun shot in a story?
If you wanted realism, I'll tell you briefly of four different situations I've heard guns go off without ear protection.If you're 30 feet away from a large caluber hunting rifle, its very loud, but not damaging.If you're in the next room from a small caliber pistol in a home, it may not even sound like a gun, and you'll walk over to see what it was.If you're in a large concrete room (a shooting range) and there are multiple shooters, you will cover your ears and run out to put your protection on, or struggle with them where you stand.If you are within 6 feet of a shotgun, especially if shooting the shotgun, it will be so loud that you may only feel and pressure in your ears like when they pop. All sounds will be deafened for a brief moment, and hearing will slowly be regained over the course of a few seconds. I was shooting a 12 guage without “ears” on and didn't even hear the shot, and neither did the person standing next to me. This can happen indoors in close proximity as well. But, as I mentioned before, if it's in another room separated by one or more closed doors, it's just an abnormally loud noise. I wasn't sure if the one I heard was a gunshot because it was in a large heavily carpeted bedroom that really absorbed the sound.So in summary, close proximity — no audible shot, ears only ring when indoors. Medium proximity — very loud, but not damaging. Distant proximity — concussive gunshot. And identifying gunshots from other noises requires an understanding of the difference between a concussive and a percussive sound, the former being an explosion, and the latter being a striking of two objects together.If you don't have experience with guns, gunshots are more concussive than fireworks. Gunshots are meant to violently explode and expell energy immediately, whereas fireworks are more tuned towards pushing multiple projectiles all around them, so they're “slower”; more of a boom than a bang. Distance blurs the line between “booms” and “bangs” because of reverberations and volume. Certain sound frequencies also travel further through the air and different obstructions such as buildings and trees.
What are some good short stories between 150 - 200 words starting with the line, "I saw a small boy standing in the woods and crying "?
I saw a small boy standing in the woods and crying. His dear tree had been felled. He was inconsolable. For that little boy it was not just a tree. It was like a friend he would rush to everyday after school, a friend who would hide him from those nasty bullies, a friend who always had sweet fruits for him, and a friend who would wrap him in a warm embrace and put him to sleep. “This is murder”, he screamed as I tried to console him. He said he would avenge the murder, he kept saying he would. I had then laughed at his innocence and dismissed it as a childish whim. But today thirty years later as I sit in the audience and listen to the same little boy, now all grown up speak about conservation of environment I know he still remembers his tree, his friend. As the audience broke into a thunderous applause after his speech, I felt he had now avenged his dear friend.
How to add onomatopoeia to a story?
An onomatopoeia refers to a sound which can be represented by a word. Water "drips", dogs "bark", wind "howls". A sigh in itself is a sound, though not exactly an onomatopoeia, and there is no real phrase or sound to replace it without beginning to make your dialogue tag sound utterly ridiculous. There is absolutely nothing wrong with keeping it simple. She sighed - your readers won't pay much attention, but will pick up on her emotion. So you don't need to waste time trying to find a fancy onomatopoeia to replace it.
I need to make a short story, whats a good idea of one. ?
Maybe think of past influences that you have had. They can be anything, from sad to joyful times, or even add fictional twists. I think books about the author's real life are more interesting than made-up/fiction stories, but adding a little fiction makes the story plot more interesting. =) I hope your short story turns out great!
Can I have constructive criticism on my short story?
I know this will sound strange, but thank you to those who are being harsh. Its a good harsh, though. The kind that helps. That "constructive criticism" part. And to who ever kept ranting about the "adopted father" bit- adopted father means HE adopted HER, not that he himself was adopted. Oh, and I am a young teen. I only could (by Yahoo! rules) get my account this year.