Rate my song?! (lyrics)?
rate my lyrics and tell me if i need to improve! 1-10 Everytime I see you with her I think about we had before Wishin I was her so you could see.. You would be so much better with me I wanna be the one to set you free But you want her I feel like Im the one who has been cheated The one whos been beated A mark no one can remove A mark made by your move I see the way you look at her What i would give to be her But instead Im watchin you from behind Oh, my love I wish you could find I know this is not long..its an idea but rate this as if it was a song..and please tell the truth! Was the song meaning full? Can you relate? Thanks..
RATE MY SONG LYRICS!!!?
This song is an incomplete rough draft, so please don't be too harsh. What A Ride Verse The days are getting colder, as the summer heats up, Can’t help but look back over my shoulder, At my moments, closeup. But everything that I see ahead of me, Is the world of chances where I’m bound to be set free. Pre-Chorus Don’t take the too much time to think, And don’t regret, and you will forever grow your wings. Chorus The best things in life, Are only the fleeting moments, The way best way to spend time, Is to bring it the closest, When you have to decide, Or if you don’t have a choice it’s, Always there, and you’ll say, Wow, what a ride. Bridge I may be young, but all I know, Is this life isn’t all there is, And the gift of ambition, itself is a miracle. And whatever road you take, You can always turn around, Even though, the life you live, Is already laid out.
Rate my song lyrics please!?
what do you think about this song that i wrote? rate it 1-10. it's about this guy who i like and he's a senior so he'll be leaving off to college soon, but i'm still a freshman and it makes me sad to think about it. but the thing is we like each other, i can just tell but he probably wont ever tell me that he actually really likes me. here it is, its called "this town" This Town: i tried to figure things out, but nothing was clear, i can't read your mind, and you don't know i'm here, and baby if i stay, i'll stay unhappy, cos things aren't the way, they're supposed to be. guess this town wasn't enough for me, to chase my dreams, guess this place wasn't enough for me, to stay happy, i'm not sure what to do, or where to start, but i'm going to miss you, and it'll break my heart, still i need to go, get out of here, just go somewhere, and figure it all out myself. the negativity here, is just too much, and i can't bear, your warm friendly touch, cos it hurts me to know, that you will have to go, and i just can't stay, here alone. guess this town wasn't enough for me, to chase my dreams, guess this place wasn't enough for me, to stay happy, i'm not sure what to do, or where to start, but i'm going to miss you, and it'll break my heart, still i need to go, get out of here, just go somewhere, and figure it all out myself. i thought you were the one, i really like you, but i can't keep the sun, or someone like you, so go on with your life, and i'll try to live mine, on my own i know, it wont be the same, but i'll be okay, if i get to see you one day. guess this town's not big enough, for the both of us, but i can't stay here, without your love, it's what kept me waiting, but since you've moved on, to bigger things, i can set myself free too.
What are some lyrics of a song that you like a lot?
We're just two lost souls swimming in a fish bowl year after year running over the same old grounds what have we found the same old fears wish you were here
Please rate my song lyrics i wrote just 5 minutes ago?
i wrote this song within few minutes so there a chance it's gonna have rough edges and few bad phrases but be mean if you like i just want to know what would people think if i sing it to them. Baptized in the river of lies Living in the town of sorrows With so called wise Style means everything to them I’m walking the hem I’m falling I’m failing They say hell is near But hell is what I’m living in Get me out. Right outta here **** I don’t wanna stay And if you’ve gone that far I’m sure you know the way Show me the way Show me the way…. I’m confronted by no humans Just plastic and puppets Style means everything to them What’s fun in walking the told direction? I’m walking the hem I fall I crawl but it feels so good To head your own path They say hell is near But hell is what we’re living in Get me out. Right outta here **** I don’t wanna stay And if you’ve gone that far I’m sure you know the way Show me the way Show me the way…. Will the paradise still take me After all lies I cleave to? And if there’s anyone who can Take me the way I’m it’s you Get me out. Right outta here **** I don’t wanna stay And if you’ve gone that far I’m sure you know the way Show me the way Show me the way….
How would you rate my voice on this song?
A very pleasant voice, well-suited for the nature of the song, smooth, not forceful but resonant, comfortable to hear, and in tune. You are so connected to the moody, spacey background that sometimes, even though it is not loud, it drowns you out - you're barely on the threshold a good deal of the time.Now the contemplative nature of the song does not want loudness or drama from the singer - all the more reason for me to echo some of the other comments already posted and suggest some thought towards diction, the pronouncing of words so that they are both meaningful in themselves and in the sequences we call sentences or lines of poetry.There was a futurist a few years back named Marshall McLuhan, who coined the phrase, "the medium is the message", meaning that people pick up a great deakl of the meaning of any presentation through the feelings the song or artwork or literature or whatever, evokes. Thus, you buy a car because of the feeling you get about the chick in the swimsuit sitting on the hood, beckoning, rather than whether or not the car runs well, or falls apart.Personally, I think that we are so saturated today with artwork and song that blurs the focus on meaning, so that the mood itself becomes the song. If that's your intent, you have succeeded. But if you desire for your lyrics - the thoughts you have put into music - to impress themselves on us listeners so we are challenged, or even trasformed by their power, you could use some diction.I hear words being tossed about for the beauty of the way the syllables sound, which is nice; but remember that syllables have a way of sliding together to form other words. Remember the old song whose last line goes, "...and laid 'im on the green", meaning the guy died. But singers, singing syllables instead of meaning, sometimes impressed the listener with "...and Lady Mondegreen." Who was this mysterious Lady Mondegreen? Did she live in the country of Tizafee? (My country, Tizafee, sweet land of liberty...")So every syllable you sing has the potential to impart meaning, or merely sound.Now I am a pianist/organist, an instrumental musician. I know that music can be good and lovely and powerful and sweet and dynamic without any words at all (my challenge is to make the notes feel as if they are being sung!) So you can design to make your song an "instrumental of the voice." But those are my thoughts, and I hope they may be helpful to you.