What do you think of my story?
If you're only fourteen, you need to never stop writing. Ever. Here's my two cents; this is a great piece of fiction for a lot of reasons. It has excellent grammar and spelling. The syntax is very engaging. Your vocabulary is admirable and you do a great job of using strong, descriptive, smaller words instead of trying to use bigger fancy ones. Since I don't believe in ever giving just negative or just positive criticism, I have to try and find some sort of thing I think needs fixing, so on and so forth. But really, all I have is this. --First, reading this brought several images to my mind. Eragon, a bit of Harry Potter, Willow (old movie), and some more. I would caution you to be careful with how you proceed as you don't want to appear to be copying those or make it too clichéd. However, I know that is not your intention, and that you probably plan on taking the story in a different direction entirely. So, that's not really an issue. --Second, the only part that pulled me away from the story was the basket. In the beginning it says the woman is carrying a bundle. The mental picture I got was just a bunch of blankets wrapped around the baby, but then suddenly there was this basket and I began wondering where it came from. Aside from those two relatively minor things, I am impressed with your skill. I also cannot give enough praise to the following sentence: "For in her arms lay a beautiful child, with hair as black as the night itself, and skin as bright as the moon." For some reason that sentence really stood out to me and it's just great. The contrast between dark and light, but using two inseparable objects... It's genius and paints a very vivid and captivating image in the readers' minds. Very well done. Your plot sounds very classic and engaging. (Just so you're aware, when I say cliché it's typically not a good thing, but classic is like a cliché that's good.) Finally, just out of curiosity, is Mel short for anything or is her name just Mel? Thanks for the good read. Hope this helps, and best of luck!
What should be the title of my short story?
What, or who is your story about?Every book in the Harry Potter series is 'Harry Potter and...' Personally I think that Rowling's titles are too long, but she's sold a lot of books!I wrote a story about a Grandmother who was a monster in disguise. She ate her grandchildren, and great-grandchildren at the end of the story. I called it 'Grandma' Short, and to the point.Dashiel Hammett was great at story titles. Who can forget:The Thin ManRed HarvestTom, Dick, or HarryThe Gutting of CouffignalDashiell HammettHow about Keith Laumer's Jame Retief short stories?Dam NuisanceTruce or ConsequencesBallot and BanditsPime Doesn't CrayTrick or TreatyJame RetiefHow about Robert A. Heinlein:Magic Inc.The Moon is a Harsh MistressThe Puppet MastersThe Roads Must RollRobert A. Heinlein bibliographyFritz Leiber?The Big TimeBazaar of the BizarreA Spectre Is Haunting TexasFritz Leiber bibliographyRobert E. Howard?Red NailsRogues in the HouseThe Hills of the DeadRobert E. Howard bibliographyIn my opinion, the best titles are short, and to the point. Too many words can ruin a title. The shorter, the better. But your title should make sense to someone who reads the story. If they don't 'get' the title after reading your story, the title is a failure.Also you want to get the reader's interest. With a short story your title is the first hook, then the first 2-3 paragraphs are your next hook. If the title doesn't get the reader, than the story doesn't matter. You have to hook them.But...Sometimes long works. Samuel R. Delany wrote a story titled, 'We, in Some Strange Power’s Employ, Move on a Rigorous Line' and because it was written by him, I read it. It's a good story. So is 'Time Considered as a Helix of Semi-Precious Stones'.Roger Zelazny wrote 'A Night in the Lonesome October' and it was a Nebula Award nominee.But both Delaney and Zelazny were well know writers. They could get away with odd titles. Can you?
I need a title for a story?
Smoked. Meaning the mother has been "smoked" and the girl has "smoked" in the past. I dunno, that's kinda lame? Hope it helped, haha. :]
A title for a clone story?
"The One Like Me" "The Copy"
Can the title of a story be a question?
Yes. Of course it can be. It doesn't matters whether the title of a story is a question or exclamation. The thing that matters the most is title should be attractive, well justified so that people yearn to read it just because of the title. For instance, I just read the book “ Few things left unsaid” because I got attract towards the title.
I need help thinking of a vampire love story title can you help me?
Okay so for the life of me i can't think of a title for my vampire love story... i have the main idea and have the first three chapters all made but with no title it is going to be hard to make this a book... SO CAN ANY ONE HELP ME, okay so i need a title that will want a deader to read it and no "Another vampire love story" or anything like that... i want the word blood in it so yes so can anyone help me
A good title for my love story?
So, I'm having trouble thinking of a title for my story. I don't want to build the story around the title, but the title around the story. I was considering 'One Night', but was afraid that seemed to simple. The plot is set in New York City, on New Years Eve. These two men meet at a club that their respective friends drag them to as third wheels, both are pretty bummed about it. They meet each other on the dance floor and hook up. It was meant to only be for one night, but they keep inevitably running into each other and a relationship begins to form... Any ideas for a title?
I Need A Title For My Story ... Any Ideas?
Teenage Assassin: The Awakening Teenage Assassin: What If Teenage Assassin: A License To Kill Teenage Assassin: A (Or "The") New Life Teenage Assassin: From The Shadows Teenage Assassin: Lifeline Teenage Assassin: From Death To Life Teenage Assassin: The Note Teenage Assassin: The Call Teenage Assassin: Conception Teenage Assassin: Trained Killer Teenage Assassin: The Replacement Teenage Assassin: The Elite (or "Elite 5" or "The Elite 5") I hope this at least helps get yours thoughts flowing :)
What do you think of the movie title "The Loners"?
Antonio, I have answered you many times before and my answer still remains the same;A title, without the context of the story means nothing.It’s an un-answerable question.Let me, one last time, try to explain it to you:Think of this title; “Flags of Our Fathers” is that a great title? - yes, I think you will say. But what if I told you that it was for a comedy?Then the answer is a loud and resounding: NO!As I told you before, a title have to communicate the genre and the mood in a simple,and memorable way.So far, your titles have done none of these things. Write the story. then pitch the story along with the title. That’s the only way you can ever get a qualified response, if that is what you want.
A Mysterious title for my story?
The students are all from different cliques but members from the cliques keep disappearing and when the teachers and the Dean of the school ignore the students they have to get together to help each other find their friends help! I need a mysterious title!