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The Falcons Flight Far, far above the clouds Against the setting sun A falcon flies alone. Soaring in the wind I hear his lonely cry So sad must he be. Riding the silent wind The falcon flies alone. Reaching out with his wings Grasps the empty sky. Riding the silent wind Never can he rest. What is within his heart None can ever know. Lonely falcon in the empty sky. I walk along the deserted country roads Walking by my side You are always there. I feel your loneliness Lonely must you be. Crickets whispering In the grassy fields. You walk there by my side You walk the path with me But you never say a word Never do you speak. What is within his heart None can ever know. Here inside this heart That walks its path alone The sadness of one Who is always alone. feel free to make any changes. rate out of 5 please
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You brought me sunshine when I only saw rain, You brought me laughter , When I only felt pain. Romantics at heart? Love at first sight? Have I known you before? God! This feels so right. Have I met you before ? Nother' time, nother' place, If it's only one night , Will it bring us disgrace? What are these feelings? Must they be temporary? Just to make you happy, seems so necessary. I want you to know, that I'll never forget, Knowing your smile~ your kisses~and yet~ Dreams are something that can't always come true, Nothing more we can say, Nothing more we can do.
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the devil inside when noone's their just beware of the darkness that hides inside it slowly creeps up as you loose controle you feal like the devil just took over your sole hammers swords bats and knifs these all can be used in a slautoring fight allyour friends become your enimies one bye one you stab slice beat and berry them as i drop to my feet drink this bottle of bleech and say good bye world this is the end of me
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Please feel free to critique. Be honest. Tell me what you feel or interpret. What u liked or didn't like? Is it good enough to get published? UNCHAINED In this cold, enormous world Plagued with madness and misery, I weave a little world of my own, And escape. Composed by Rishikaysh © 2006 Rishikaysh. ps: please also check out my other poems by clickling on my name.
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I think expression is great in any form. My one critique is that since you use rhyme and slant rhyme you should probably revise to make each line have the same amount of syllables. That will give it more rhythm. Alternatively you could keep the blank verse, but do not worry about the end of the lines rhyming. Those are my opinions though. It seems like a good portion of a longer poem. I encourage you to add a few more lines, perhaps 4, and roll with that if you want.
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Stay Out of the Rain I woke up alone Under rain’s dome Thunder moaned Flashes, lights, stones Heavens fell upon me No revelation to see The way of the world can be Locked with a bent metal key The man of gold sings aloud The penny man not proud Funny where they are now Where insane men howl Exchanging extremes, say “Have a nice day, Stay out of the rain!”
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Your examples are sometimes easy to read, but not always. I prefer the way poetry flows evenly, rather than a few words, then a dozen, then twenty, then back down to six, then up to a dozen and so on. For me, poetry is an art form that young and old can enjoy, rather than trying to wrap the human brain around something that has stumbling blocks in the way.You seem to be experimenting with expressing yourself, yet in a strange way some of the time. Poets may remain like that and at that level, until they start submitting poems to publishers. When they study the poems that others contributed, they switch to match their styles, rather than what they could write in competition to such approved and published poets.By clicking my Denis Martindale profile link, to see how I write, you may see my poems as a guide as to how I express myself... mostly with a format rhyming scheme for the common metre 8, 6, 8, 6 syllables style. I do not always write like this, but I am not writing just for myself. I am trying to get something written that each reader can read well the very first time.I do not have a dash to start a new line. That is usually at the end of the line above. Most of the time, I just use a comma between the phrases or the ... instead.Sometimes you use full stops and sometimes you omit these. Now consider writing a beginning, a middle and an end as most readers are searching for...Please, Leave me; to be caught; By God's two hands; Below the thick, white clouds. Why write in this way and then leave the reader there?Here is my version for such a promising beginning...::::PLEASE LEAVE ME...::Please leave me to be caught aboveBy God's two hands on high,That in God's care I find true love,In wonder, asking, 'Why?'And then to whisper, 'I love you!My Lord, my God, my Friend!'And nevermore to bid adieu,To be loved without end!:For He is mine and I am HisAnd evermore shall be,Contented by our constant bliss,For all eternity!Rejoicing in each other's smiles,Beyond both space and time,In Heaven, where no sin defiles,In truth and peace sublime...:Where angels fly, with outspread wings,Adorned with precious gold,Before God's Son, the King of Kings,His glory to behold!Please leave me to be caught aboveBy God's two hands on high,That in God's care I find true love,In wonder, asking, 'Why?'::Denis Martindale 8th of April 2016.::