Please read and critique my Poem if you would like?
I tried to not make this a first person poem. Just working on that as an alleged poet trying to improve. Has anyone else had a life experience that made them a better man, or woman. I have had many (and continue to have them) and they are as vivid now as they were the day it happened. I take a lot of joy in finally being able to put some of these experiences into words, poetic style, and I am glad I can share it with you. Thanks, Bri The Big Hinz It came a Spring Day in Eight Grade One of life’s lessons was about to be made We still remember stuff like this ought her? To stay on the beaten path n for daughter He was the perfect young boy to anyone’s standard The most popular, athletic, smart and man-ward But an image to uphold was part of the deal This is where the Big Hinz comes in for real Big Hinz had no friends anyone could tell Ideal fall guy for popular’s head to swell Every day walked into class Big Hinz’s class-mates bellowed “At him” agas. Then one day Man on Campus walked by Big Hinz he reported and chuckled a sigh “No more BH.” the Hinz a straight stone face “Say What?” was popular's lone retrace “Don’t say BH anymore” last warning to be “Big Hinz” popular said as he snickered with glee The last thing Mr. Pops recalls he was on his a-rse Cold-cock-ed in the face this was no farce. Looks up and sees students belly laughing at Him What will Popular do to make up for this whim? Thoughts ran through his head as He got up on His Feet ?? Part One of Two (Conclusion tomorrow) Note: BH = Big Hinz
Would you read this poem and c/c?
. . ...............Naivete........... . Moonlight drifter tracks the night Not in anger, nor to fright; Rather to observe the strife. Fragment littered, ragged lives. Dodging daggers thrown from eyes. Pausing at a place of needs, Woeful house where rancor breeds. Sterilize its poison seeds. Let the endless bickering Find a hymn of hope to sing.. Sitting curbside, head in hands, No more beating he would stand. Foster dad met one, unplanned. Falling to his knees, he cried. People change and none know why. Trusting children weep forlorn, Sometimes wonder why they're born. Innocence forever torn. Naive thinking, to reflect, Moonlight drifter to protect. . . . . 07--17--13. . . .
Poem Help (Analyzing a Poem)?
Well I'm not really sure if this is right but this is my view on the poem: Themes I came up with: You can't fix what's broken. You can't return something to what it once was. Nothing can change what has just been said or done. 1.) I believe this poem is pretty much saying that whatever bad thing occured can't be fixed. One issue could be that a child has lost the trust of his/her parents.This poem raises the issue of some parents not being able to trust or confide in their children leading up to the children possibly running away or being bitter towards their parents. Later in the poem it states: "Though often you may pull me close again, You'll never hold your child." Which I believe this to mean that even if the parent does pull the child back in they won't have the same trust they had with their parents before. They would not be holding, in their arms, their child, now different. The childs mistakes can't be taken back. 2.) Well when it talks about the "womb" it may symbolize and enclosed space. Same with "bud". You can't return something once it has been taken away from that enclosed space. "You can't return the faint to the womb" Which pretty much can mean it's impossible to return something to that original state. "A bloom holds not the promise of a bud" A bloom can't hold the promise of a bud popping out because it was the bud who holds the promise of a bloom. This sentece can also signify that it's impossible to return something to it's original state. Hope you understand my thoughts.=] Good luck and hope I helped.
Are people losing interest in reading and writing poems nowadays? Why?
Thanks for A2A.Apart from the ‘no wait’ phenomenon mentioned by Anushree Jain in her answer, there are few more reasons why people find poems boring. I will try to answer this from the perspective of both a reader and a poet.Poems require attention. This is the major blow for many people. Reading and getting the essence of a poem requires the reader to be in a blissful environment with his concentration totally on the content. This is very very difficult in today’s world, where the priorities last less than a minute. Frequent switches in mood causes this too.Poems need a rhythm. Every poem, needs to have a rhythm to keep the reader engaged. The reader should be able to sing it easily. When I say rhythm, it does not necessarily mean a rhyme-scheme, but at least some holding technique which makes the poem go alive in the reader’s head.Recitation beats reading. Any day, any time. Being a poet, I’ve realized that poems are best received(and created) as verses, which can be spoken. Read poem or read a story? Story please.Story beats poem. Starting from pre-school, poems are always taught as complimentary things. Text (read stories) is the real deal. As a reader, you read paragraphs more, than verses, in your entire life. This makes the brain take assumption that grasping a story is easier than grasping a poem(which in itself is not always long).Poems : Stories :: Listeners : Readers.
What should I say to a girl when she doesn't reply to me?
Before giving up, like most suggest, try these:Switch medium - go from text to call for example (voice conversation will help re-create the good feeling of the in person meeting)Switch texting medium - go from text to Whatsapp(she will not see the bad precedents of unanswered texts)Send an out-out - say you made your moves but it’s her turn now(you remind her you won’t chase for ever, if she liked you, chances are she will do her part)Say you’re not available - you left town or are not interested anymore(We want what we can’t have and if she liked you she’ll miss you)note: I only use it when I actually left town and know I’ll be back. Works wonders to help you meet her once you’re backOffer something - you’re the asker now. Give something instead (see example below, how an unresponsive girl called me right away)Let her see you radiant - massive success is always the best attraction toolIt’s also fine to simply let her be and move on, but take into account that many times that’s an ego protection mechanism and does not maximize your chances of finding a partner.The above steps will instead.————————————————————————————————————I would also avoid the funny lines mentioned here, such as:“you’re busy with your BF, I’m busy with my GF”They’re not really funny and most of them scream “bu**hurt”.If you want to read more real stuff with examples, take a look here: effective ways to make her reply
An analogy to ponder?
I have a bookcase in my room. It contains various books of literature, science, history, mythology, poetry, and philosophy. In my collection of books, some are factual and some are not. A fictional book of literature is not automatically true because it is next to a factual book of science. A factual book of history cannot be dismissed as false because it is near a book of imaginative poetry. If the Bible is a collection of books, possibly similar to the types of books on the average person's bookshelf, how can anyone consider it entirely true or entirely false?
This guy wrote me a poem but I want to PLAY HARD TO GET. He is my crush....and?
I dont want to throw myself at him yet. Or let him know I am crushing too much on him.....I been trying to find something witty to say about the poem....Should i try to act like i didnt like it that much...? Or go head over heels and tell him i loved it. This is a moment where i too excited i dont want to things to come out wrong....or say the wrong things or act too desperate....etc HELP PLS.
How do I get confirm that I really love her?
Can I answer this question in a manner which applies to me personally? I mean, people might send you a long checklist of actions, feelings, past experiences etc etc. You can read a thousand articles online or ask a hundred people. Can another person truly validate the deepest and most intense feelings you will ever feel for another human being?Lets keep it simple. You will know it when you know it. Thats it. Nothing else will come close to making you realize what love feels like. Everyone has a different definition for love. You can read flowery poetry, long descriptions of passion and affection and chemistry and whatnot. You have to taste icecream to see what it feels like. Then you will know the real deal and all the other times you confused milkshakes or chocolate or cake for icecream. Forgive the atrocious analogy.For me personally, love is the deep sense of peace and comfort I feel at my core. Something i never realized I lacked until i found it. Its a wonderful absence of anxiety and emptiness. Something always nagging at the edges of my conscience even when I was at my happiest and most uninhibited.But thats like, what I feel, you know? For you maybe it is something entirely different and that is OK. Best of luck. Love is wonderfully terrible and only the blessed feel it.
Will all poets read this (indisputable) GOOGLE translation of?
Thank you Gio for sharing this with us. I appreciate you asking me to add something constructive to your argument but I'm ashamed to say I know too little on the subject and I never personally use the Greek language. This is a question for you: what are the wider implications of this argument? I appreciate your corrections to these mistranslations but I feel that you are trying to make a wider point about langauge.. And I'm a little lost on the significance of the orthodox church here. I'm afraid you would perhaps have to spell this one out to me a little bit more ;) I do have a view on language as whole though that perhaps you would appreciate. It's always occured to me that the act of translation is far more complex than most people believe it to be. It's not a mere one word/phrase exchanged for another in a different language. Language has been developed historically in every culture in completely different contexts and stages of human development. Certain concepts that belong to one culture doesn't necessarily even appear or occur to people in other languages. The example of 'sarcasm' is a good one. Before about 1500 years ago the basic concept of sarcasm didn't occur to anybody. (I've forgotten the name but there was a priest in England who wrote a sarcastic book about the catholic faith and the church simply didn't understand it - some even praised it.) So the concept of 'sarcasm' you could say was invented or perhaps discovered, who knows? That's a question! haha The gap between languages has diminished a lot lately due to internationalisation and the historical spread of american-english culture to (then) lesser developed countries. For example: you'll find a lot of English concepts appear in Japanese but many old Japanese concepts still don't appear in English.. Says something about history, right? But anyway - due to that I'm sure many japanese-english translations are entirely incorrect or perhaps can't (easily or at all) be translated. I suppose what I'm really trying to say here is that all language is contextual and will never be able to be perfectly translated (especially between older languages to new ones) since it really depends on the stage of cultural development associated with that particular language. This argument hasn't been particularly well written or explained (would need more space and several more examples) but I hope you kind of get what I'm saying.