Would You Proof Read This

Story, can you proof read it :)?

Join a critique group or writers' circle. There is probably one in the nearest big city, or there are lots online. Yahoo Groups runs quite a few: look for those where messages are private, so only members can read your work. Not all critique groups are created equal - I went through several before I found one that could help me. Ideally you want one with people who are better writers than you, so you can learn from them. The "poor man's copyright" (mail the work to yourself and don't open the envelope) gives you a warm feeling, but is legally worthless. It won't stand up in court if you ever have to sue someone for infringing your copyright. It proves the *envelope* was in your possession on the date of the postmark, but doesn't prove that what's in the envelope was in your possession then. You could have mailed an empty, unsealed envelope to yourself years ago and put a copy of the book into it the day before you came to court. If the poor man's copyright worked, you would be able to find court cases where it had helped the "poor man" to win. I don't believe there are any such cases.

Do you proof read?

Actually, I not only proof-read my materials intended for submissions, but I have a couple others whom I trust proof-read my materials.
Proof-reading is a definite in the writing industry.
Trusting the individuals you have proof-read your materials is also an absolute. Don't ever give your materials to just anyone...get someone who will read them for you on a consistent basis after having them sign a contract that all submissions to them are your sole property and that they will not reproduce, take, steal or use for their own benefits.
Copywrite your stuff. Simple and cheap way is to send the stuff to yourself...never open the envelopes and place them in a safe deposit box or somewhere safe.
A more expensive way is to register them as yours through the writer's guild.
They accept member submissions and non-member submissions. Normally it's a ten year...then re-submit.
Good luck and good writing.
PS...don't do e-books and e-line's. People steal others work that way every day. Nothing is safe online. Cut and paste is simple, fast and easy.

Who wants to proof-read this for me! :D?

Okay - I've read it through and it's very good. I've seen you around and you're obviously very smart, and it shows. Good grammar and punctuation and great information. I have a few suggestions and they're really just a matter of style: (these are in order).

Where it says "by film and television" I think "through film and television would be better"

"even inspired some to take up the sport. As those interested soon learned" - "has even inspired some to take up the sport. As those interested soon learn" (you've already established present tense by saying "Fencing is a sport").

"honest to its origins" - "true to its origins"

"how far back it began" - "its true age" or "how old it really is"

"this pivotal tournament" - "this pivotal sporting event" or "this pivotal spectacle"

"chain mail" - "chainmail" (one word - do you hate me yet?)

"So, for a time fencing" - "So, for a time, fencing" (the extra comma - that's really nit-picking, but I think it's better)

"Not only was proper skill and technique" - "not only were (plural) proper skill and technique"

"of principal importance to the life of a gentleman" - "of principal importance in the life of a gentleman."

Could you proof read this please?

Dans mon journée idéale, Je me reveille à six heures matin. Je me sens très heureux! Je me prépare pour la journée. Je me lève à partir de lit. Je me brose les dents. Je me lave la figure. Je me douche. Je m’habille dans en couleurs des vêtements. Je m’assois et je mange déjeuner. Je me vois dans le mirior et quitter.

-must have 4 irregulr reflexive verbs
-must have 6 reguler verbs
-a paragraph about "ma journee ideale"
-creative
-original
*this is not completed, just what I have so far.

Thanks!

Please could you proof read this?

Overall your writing is pretty good. But Americans, although very infamous for their slavery practices (mostly due to media really, as it occurred in equally horrifying frequencies in most western nations) did not actually start the slave trade. Slavery is thousands of years old, but the transatlantic trade you're referring to was initiated by the Portuguese and later joined by the Spanish.

Also I think it would be worthy commenting on recent events and how America, with all of it's glorious power has facilitated the murder of thousands, if not millions of people in the Middle East. I understand the whole concept of 'war on terror', but I don't see how killing innocent people, by trying to stop people that want to killing innocent people, solves the problem. It's the equivalent of a prisoner escaping in New York and then the police department just randomly blowing up buildings and killing people, in an attempt to capture the said prisoner. Well not entirely, but same general idea.

They have also involved a number of other nations into this battle, including Britain. As an Australian I seriously don't agree with Americas war policy, but as an allied force our soldiers are sent to fight for Americas cause. Sure they say it's for everyone's benefit in the fight against terror, but as far as I know we have never had a serious terrorism threat, let alone an attack in Australia, from the people that supposedly want to destroy us.

I think also mentioning that America's emission statistics and their impact on the environment might be a good idea. I doubt there's a country in the world that is damaging the environment more than America, when looking at it from a damage to percentage of worlds population perspective.

You should sum it up by acknowledging that as much of the modern world sighs over the 'American dream' and although the American people have made valuable contributions to the world at large, they are not without fault and have made many regrettable contributions as well. Or something like that, just a general statement summarising your overall point. Use strong words though, you want that last bit to really stick with them.

That's just my opinion anyway :). Good luck on your speech.

Could you proof-read my short essay?

To analyze and edit this short essay, it should be divided into three parts. For clarity, the parts will be called: Paragraph 1, Paragraph 2, and Paragraph 3. Some suggestions will be offered for each paragraph.

Paragraph 1
(1) Expand the introductory sentence by stating that life in contemporary society has multiple meanings. It's many meanings appear to be related how the individual judges himself. If born into a comfortable life, the individual should define his life by his experiences. Since his experiences appear to be positive, views of his own life will be positive. He also is likely to have higher expectations than those of the previous generation of his parents. Furthermore, unless interfered with by unknown experiences, he is likely to achieve those expectations. On the other hand, the meaning of life from the middle also will have middle level expectations . . . .Still lower on this scale of life's meaning of life, the lower third of the distribution will have lower levels of expectations, and lower achievement from those expectations.
It may be necessary to cut the example of the current movie because your theme seemed to have changed to three definitions of life, and it should continue with those three theories of life's meaning. If you were born into the good life, you will expect the good life, and you will achieve the better than good life. Logically, it then follows if you were born into a moderate life, you will expect a moderate life, and you will achieve a life that is just slightly above moderate. And the same is true if you were born with a definition of life that was low, low expectations will follow and lower slightly higher than the lower expectations than those into which you were born.

If you are convinced that these suggestions should prove valuable to the essay, then be alert to changing both Paragraph 2 and Paragraph 3.

A last comment, be consistent if the decision is to follow this theory. Different circumstances are related to three different social expectations and achievements. If you are high born, everything that follows will be slightly higher than high born. If you are middle born,then every thing that follows will be slightly higher than middle born. And, if you are low born, everything that follows will be slightly higher than low born.

Could you plz proof read my Essay :-)?

A lot of teachers do not like the use of contractions in essays

I WAS NOT the kind of person who enjoyed reading at a young age. In fact, I had never actually sat down and read a book. However, sometimes my parents forced me to read a short story or a picture book which I NEVER TOOK seriously. Since, I didn’t enjoy reading, I always skipped pages and told my parents that I had actually read it. Therefore, I lacked of reading skills until I was ten years of age. (You need some type of thesis statement to tie in your paragraphs) AS A YOUNG CHILD I DISLIKED READING AND LACKED THE PATIENCE FOR IT, AS I GREW OLDER I VALUED ITS IMPORTANCE AND WITH MORE TIME, DEVELOPED THE PATIENCE AND LOVE FOR READING.

I DID NOT read books or short stories because I didn’t like THE stories, it was just boring for me to sit there and read. However, I was a big fan of short stories or tales when they were told. Every night before going to beD I was told stories and sometimes even joKEs that made me laugh.

As I grew up, I UNDERSTOOD that reading is really important FOR NOT JUST ME, BUT MY SIBLINGS AS WELL. Moreover, I started to force myself to read short stories and even picture books to improve my reading skills and to set a good example for MY siblings. From there on I started reading and sometimes I even read with my siblings to improve their reading skills also.

After I had the solid foundation for reading, I started to learn a new language with my mom: English. I was only around twelve years of age when I had my first English lesson. Slowly, the new language started to make sense to me and I began to apply those reading skills to the new language. When we arrived in Canada, I was a bit familiar with the language and the first thing I did was get books from the library. At first, I started off with short stories and then slowly went to harder and thicker books.

Now, that I am fifteen years of age I read fluently and still read books. My favorite author is RJ. Rowling, who has written the Saga’s of Darren Shan which are great books. I usually prefer to read at night or when I have nothing to do. I personally like adventure books and books that are told in first person.

Could you please proof read this??

Personally I think the idea is dumb and there are many health department reasons that would make this idea never fly. I'm sure I didn't get everything but here's my edit. Basically, you have sentences that are too wordy, many misspellings, too many "!" and some statement don't make sense

My puppy is more then just a pet. She is my furry-baby! Many people in the US feel the same way. While there are dog lovers, there there are also dog haters.

I may not mind being seated next to a dog but many people would! I think it would be OK to allow owners to be there with their dogs, but there must be limits. For example:
1- The dog would need proof of rabies shots. If something were to happen and a person, or another dog, was bit, evidence of being current with vaccination would be a big relief.
2- The dog must wear a collar or harness with a leash at all times. This is to prevent the dog getting away or bothering other people .

There are also things the restaurant would have to do, so they could keep old costumers and get new dogie costumers! The restaurant would need to have a dog section and a non-dog section. Many people have fur related allergies and would like to be sit in the non-dog section. Others would just prefer not to dine with dogs.

People who have a dog, or like dogs, could sit in the dog section. They would also have to provide a 'potty' spot for the puppies outside.

Yes, dogs droll and scratch. They make messes. But a true dog lover could get past that! And any willing restaurant could get past that too, If a restaurant goes the extra mile in making a place where you and you puppy can dine, while allowing others to dine without being disturbed by the dogs, they could be making a lot of money.

Please help! Would you please proof read for me?

Unfortunately, the bolding and underscoring I applied did not come through. But here is your corrected paragraph. I've placed notes in parenthisis following each change.

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Leon J. Suenes once said, (comma added) “Happy are those who dream dreams and are ready to pay the price to make them come true (Inspiration Quotes).” (Period after end parenthesis and before end quotation mark. Underline Inspiration Quotes) This quote describes well the lesson that one can learn by comparing and contrasting the characters in the poems “Ulysses,” (quotations because it's a short poem) by Alfred Lord Tennyson and The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock (needs to be underlined; it's a long poem), by T.S. Elliot.

(New paragraph) Although Ulysses and Prufrock have much in common, the two men have very different personalities (no semicolon) which lead them in two entirely different directions in life. (No new paragraph) Ulysses and Prufrock are both older gentlemen who have experienced life. (end this sentence here and add "Until this point" at beginning of next sentence) Until this point Ulysses has had an exciting life and been on many adventures. He (changed from Ulysses) has met many people and learned many things. Prufrock, however, has not done much. He (changed from Prufrock) has heard others’ (apostrophe added) gossip about him and has been hurt by this. He has spent his time striving to be embraced by the society which he so fears will reject him.