Would you be interested in seeing this movie? Rate my logline/description!?
Would you see this movie? After mysteriously disappearing for ten years, a notorious young man returns home to rural Pennsylvania to recruit his twelve year old brother in helping him take vengeance against those who deserve to die- who happen to be some of he town's most beloved residents. Rate from 1-10. Would you be anxious to see/watch a trailer/ learn more about this film?
What do you think of the following synopsis for The Wê Anthology?
Thus far, what I see is a mixed bag. You have some strong loglines for some of the various shorts, but then others are very vague. It is unclear whether or not this is a documentary with such footage as that or if this is a fictional anthology series. It is also unclear, as presented, as to what this is actually for. Are you trying to write a synopsis for the back jacket of a DVD/Blu-ray set? Are you trying to pitch this anthology film to distributors? Your strongest loglines are:Chapter Two: "Love For One Day" — A girl falls in love with the wrong boy and deals with the consequences. [Drama]Chapter Five: "A Face Behind A Face" — A young man who's a compulsive liar tries to escape detection in a small village. [Comedy]Chapter Seven: "A Lost Childhood" — Two brothers abandoned by their mother go in search of their 200-year-old grandmother who used to be a mermaid. [Fantasy]All three of these examples are excellent loglines. They introduce the main character(s), they introduce the world/setting/situation, and they introduce the core conflict. The Chapter Five one needs to offer us a reason why he is escaping the village. That can be done with just a few additional words, but beyond that, these ones are great. The others are lacking in those aforementioned necessary elements for strong loglines. Rather than rewrite them for you, I'll just suggest that you look at the three above, figure out why I think they are so strong, read what I wrote about the elements necessary for a compelling logline, and change them up. And again, what is the purpose for this? What's the context? Are you developing the DVD/Blu-ray cover, front and back, which would explain the Disc One and Disc Two mentions? Either way, looks very interesting.
What are loglines for these movies? (look below)?
A logline is the one-line summary of a movie - like you'd see in TV Guide. So for Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, it's: Young Charlie Bucket yearns for the chance to tour Willy Wonka's magical chocolate factory. The Maltese Falcon: Private detective Sam Spade is pulled into the dangerous hunt for a legendary statue. Touch of Evil - I haven't seen! Sorry! Try the IMDb. Batman Begins - Bruce Wayne, seeking vengeance for his parents' muder, journeys on the path to becoming Batman and cleaning up Gotham City. Aladdin - Street urchin Aladdin's life is turned upside-down when he comes upon a magic lap with a Genie inside.
When writing new movie scripts, how should I create the loglines, synopses, characters, locations, and outlines?
If you are ‘writing a new movie script’, write the script. That’s the hard part. You can’t write a script without creating characters and locations, so that’s those two aspects dealt with.If you ask a question like this it suggests you are starting from scratch, on spec, on a project for yourself. If that is the case, forget about loglines and synopses and all that BS. They’ll come later. Write the script. Nothing else matters.Screenwriting has changed a lot over the last 10 years. In some ways it has become a lot more competitive and tougher to break into. There’s more money in it than ever and anyone with a keyboard can sit in their room and type up a script.However as methods improve we’re seeing a lot of last generations screen writers fall behind. Combine that with the ever driving demand for entertainment fueled by services like Netflix and we have more openings than ever.But if you’re getting started with screen writing you need to seperate yourself from the rest of the pack. If you haven’t seen it already this looks at the change in methods and gives you the audiobook of Save the Cat which has been the ‘must have’ for screenwriters over the last 15 years: How Young Guns in Screenwriting are Winning. – Talz Mag – Medium
Is this a good logline?
"A psychiatrist goes through great lengths and channels to save a raped and abused young American Indian girl from further impending danger." First of all, take out 'young' (since we knew she was young when you called her a girl) and 'further' (which implies that the action in the story has already happened, and counteracts the great word 'impending'). So, we are left with: "A psychiatrist goes through great lengths and channels to save a raped and abused American Indian girl from impending danger." You want to personalize the characters in the story, to make them seem more interesting and relate-able, which will make the viewers want to watch. Try using names to some extent. Instead of 'American Indian' put what tribe she is from, for example, Cherokee. Change 'great lengths and channels' because it is ambiguous, and doesn't interest the reader. At least hint at the danger, as the word 'danger' isn't in itself very ominous. Also, using the word 'raped' in a log line is not a very good idea, since it will be released to the general public, which includes young children. Using a made up scenario, since I don't know what your movie is about: "Maxwell Harris, an aging psychiatrist, crosses the Appalachian Mountains to save Dancing Rain, the abused Cherokee daughter of his former love, from her impending death." Hope this helps!
Screenwriters, how is my logline? Following yet another breakdown, a quirky teacher who believes she’s an alien gets more than she bargained for in therapy when strange events catapult her to the epicenter of a surreal journey of self-discovery.
It’s a tad wordy. A logline should be concise with a minimal amount of “fat”. The wording is too detailed making it difficult to follow. I would try something similar to “following a recent breakdown, [insert teacher’s name], a self proclaimed alien, is thrown into a strange journey of self discovery during a routine therapy session.”With that, you introduce the main character, a recent event involving the character, and a description of the plot without giving too much away. Other than that it sounds like an interesting story.
What is the next step after writing a good logline for a script?
Writing a clever and compelling Logline is perhaps the most important “sales tool” for pitching a TV series or movie. Supporting that core concept would then be a tightly written treatment that details what we’re watching in the series or film. The format and content of a treatment varies depending on the genre.If you’re pitching a television docuseries, you’ll want to focus on describing two key elements; the characters involved, and the world they live in. If you’re pitching a formatted reality TV show idea, then you’ll want to write a synopsis of the overall concept along with a detailed step-outline that takes us through the progression of each episode and a season arc. If you’re pitching a scripted TV series, you’ll hopefully have a great sample pilot script from which your treatment is based on. Scripted series treatments are much more developed and detailed with character descriptions, pilot story outline, themes explored in the series, sample episode stories, and the potential path of the series as it would evolve. You can find detailed insight on writing treatments for reality shows here, and writing treatments for scripted series here.If you’re logline is for a movie pitch, you’ll want to write a treatment that gives a clear linear view of the story. It should reflect what would be in the script, but written in a very efficient manner for the most impact. It’s like taking the reader on a fly-over of the movie and point out only the most important highlights, twists and turns in the story.Have fun, and write inspired!
Screenwriting: Can you validate if my logline is interesting for you?
No, that logline is quite confusing. Here is the logline for Jaws:"A police chief with a phobia for open water battles a gigantic shark with an appetite for swimmers and boat captains despite a greedy town council that demands the beach stay open for tourist business. "Now let's use this example to rewrite yours: When spooky events begin to happen, a heartbroken boyfriend distrusts his friends and neighbors when they tell him the ghost is his old girlfriend. You know your story. I'm sure you can come up with an even better version. Just follow the format. Don't use first names.
Where to put a longline on a Screenplay?
Anyone apply to the Television Academy internship? I m confused, they want a logline for the 4 page scene that is a part of the application process, but where do you put the longline on the scene? Does it go on the title page? The site just says "Applicants must submit a hard copy of an original scene (approx. four pages) from current comedy or drama series with a logline." Can someone explain this? Also how does formatting work for a scene? would I still put Acts at the top? Is it different from a film script, because it is a television script?