Can someone help me check my intro paragraph please?
The American Dream: where individuals experience limitless opportunity and are able to go as far as their own ambition takes them. The mindset of people leads them to entertain the unrealistic belief that easy money and eternal happiness will come when living in America. Thus the American Dream is a belief that, in the United States, if a person wants to achieve something, he or she can make it happen. No one really has a sense of how much hard work and dedication comes with trying to build a life for yourself and your family .The American Dream is really so named due to the opportunity, which seemingly exists only here in America, for an ambitious person to be able to be an outstanding success through his or her own hard work and determination. People strive to realize their own dream. Some of those already here in America chase their dream by a wish to be more successful than their parents, and others who immigrate to this country chase their dream by giving up everything just to get here and have the opportunity to succeed.
Is any one bored? Mind making up a paragraph for me? Check it out! =]?
A MARKED MAN -OR- IS THAT A MOON MARKER? Morris was a mortician, but he wanted more. He was tired of talking to dead people or the morose mourners who came to see them at the mortuary. Moreover, Morris felt he had a mission in life that wasn't being fulfilled. More than anything, Morris wanted to go to the Moon. You see, Morris was a regular space maniac, so he set his mind on becoming the first mortician space man. Miraculously, Morris was accepted into NASA's Moon Module program. There were plans to build a Moon base, and Morris was picked to be on the team. Many months later, the Moon module touched down next to the Sea of Tranquility. Morris was the first one out of the ship. But, the magnificent moment was all too short. There was a malfunction with his suit. He was mortally wounded as all of the oxygen escaped from his lungs. Poor Morris! The payload for the return trip was too great, so the team had to leave his mortal remains behind. He is now immortalized in a special monument. You might say that Morris's life was full of irony. He will be remembered more as a Moon marker than a remarkable Moon explorer
Can someone check my paragraph? (It's in Spanish)?
We have an oral exam today in my Spanish class about our bad day and I just want to make sure everything is okay. I'm mainly concerned that it makes sense and is conjugated correctly. Thanks :) Por la mañana me levanté con el pie izquierdo. Olvidé poner al despertador anoche. Por eso fui tarde a mi primera clase en la universidad. Yo estaba estresada porque hace una semana, me grito mi profesora por llegar tarde a la clase. Yo corrí a mi coche y conduje a la universidad. Sin embargo, descubrí mi clase fue cancelé. Me senté en la biblioteca por cinco horas sin nada que hacer. Finalmente, mi segunda clase empezó son las cuatro y media de la tarde. La profesora devolvió nuestras pruebas últimas. La nota fue muy mala. Lloré todo el camino casa. Yo no podría esperar ir a la cama. Por lo menos mañana es un nuevo día para empezar de cero. It should say... In the morning I woke up on the wrong side of the bed. I forgot to set the alarm clock last night. For that reason I was late to my first class at the University. I was stressed out because a week ago my teacher yelled at me for being late to class. I ran to my car and drove to the University. However, I discovered my class was canceled. I sat in the library for five hours with nothing to do. Finally, my second class began at 4:30pm. The teacher returned our last test. The grade was very bad. I cried all the way home. I could not wait to go to bed. At least tomorrow is a new day to start from scratch.
Where can I use the Internet to check a paragraph for grammatical errors?
I can recommend this paragraph checker to use - it’s really nice and easy. The only thing you will need to do is to enter your text into online editor and click the button. The best thing is that this checker is totally free and gives you a full report about the quality of your text. Here’s example of that report:But you have to remember that there’s no 100% guarantee of the quality - machines are not able to fully understand the meaning of the text. That’s why after you get the result check it - if you say that you watch movies freely you have to be able to see if something’s absolutely wrong and out of place. :)Hopefully this answer helps and good luck!
I was making my brother check my introduction paragraph for my essay. He pointed out that I had two ideas in a sentence and told me to separate it. Is this right? The sentence he pointed out was my thesis statement.
This totally depends. If you’re just writing something like a two-page essay, then your argument is probably not complex enough to warrant two sentences for a thesis, otherwise your paper would be longer.If you are dealing with a more complex topic, or maybe a comparison and contrast paper, you might be better off breaking it into two sentences for clarity.Your key goal should not be to put as much information as possible into one sentence, but to make your sentences as easy to read as possible. If you’ve already familiarized the reader with your topic in the introduction, you may not need to break down your thesis. However, if you’re going in cold turkey, consider breaking it into two separate ideas. Whatever makes the paper flow most smoothly.
Check to see if I used proper grammar in these paragraphs (Spanish 1 class)?
Generally, it's really good, especially for Spanish 1. I'm in Spanish 5 : [ it's hard. There are just a few minor things that need changing that I've capitalized. ¡Hola! Yo soy Anne Marie. Yo soy morena y baja. No soy alta. Soy ambiciosa y callada pero cómica. Yo soy polaca y LITUANA (because you're female), también. ¡Mi familia es cómica! Mi madre es rubia y mi padre es moreno y alto. Mis hermanos son Chris y Eric. Ellos son morenos y perezosos. Mis hermanas son Nikki y Jessie. Ellas son morenas y amables. Jessie es ambiciosa y cómica, también. Mi sobrina, Erica, es rubia. ¿Es bonita, no? ¡Mis amigos son FANTASTICOS (because your subject is plural)! Beth es rubia y baja- no es alta. Ella es cómica, ambiciosa, y muy simpática. Otra AMIGA (because Krista is female) es Krista. Ella es morena y amable. Es bastante callada, también. Mi amigo, Josh, es moreno. Y también, es gracioso y muy agradable. TODOS (because your subject is plural) de MIS (it just flows better) amigos son muy intelegentes, también. La clase de religion es divertida. Las clases de matemáticas y ingles son FACILES (because your subject is plural). En la clase de ciencia, yo ESTOY CON (I think you're meaning to say, "In science class, I am with my friends. Before it said "In science class I am are my friends, minor mistake) MIS (because your subject is plural) amigas. Es difícil pero interesante. La clase de historia es cómica y el curso de español es divertido. Besides those little adjustments, it's great. Oh and one of the answerers that said you need to use "pelo de rubio" is completely wrong. That's not how you say that. Rubio/a means blonde and you don't need pelo too. Very good job, keep working!