What do you think of my poem?
I think expression is great in any form. My one critique is that since you use rhyme and slant rhyme you should probably revise to make each line have the same amount of syllables. That will give it more rhythm. Alternatively you could keep the blank verse, but do not worry about the end of the lines rhyming. Those are my opinions though. It seems like a good portion of a longer poem. I encourage you to add a few more lines, perhaps 4, and roll with that if you want.
I love this poem. What do you think of it?
Bukowski is hit or miss for me. I do like the poem you posted. Here's my favorite by him: dreamlessly old grey-haired waitresses in cafes at night have given it up, and as I walk down sidewalks of light and look into windows of nursing homes I can see that it is no longer with them. I see people sitting on park benches and I can see by the way they sit and look that it is gone. I see people driving cars and I see by the way they drive their cars that they neither love nor are loved- nor do they consider sex. it is all forgotten like an old movie. I see people in department stores and supermarkets walking down aisles buying things and I can see by the way their clothing fits them and by the way they walk and by their faces and their eyes that they care for nothing and that nothing cares for them. I can see a hundred people a day who have given up entirely. if I go to a racetrack or a sporting event I can see thousands that feel for nothing or no one and get no feeling back. everywhere I see those who crave nothing but food,shelter, and clothing; they concentraate on that dreamlessly. I do not understand why these people do not vanish I do not understand why these people do not expire why the clouds do not murder them or why the dogs do not murder them or why the flowers and the children do not murder them, I do not understand I suppose they are murdered yet I can't adjust to the fact of them because they are so many. each day each night, there are more of them in the subways and in the buildings and in the parks they feel no terror at not loving or at not being loved so many many many of my fellow creatures. --Charles Bukowski
What do you think of poetry?
I wonder what facet of poetry you refer to - it’s impact? It’s unity? The tangible rhyme scheme and meter of it? I will just assume all of the above and allow myself to ramble ;)Poetry, to me, is the life spring of human language. Of course we require the oceans of vocabulary and the rivers of practical speech to carry our day to day interactions. But oh, bliss of heaven! to tap into those hidden mountain springs of tranquil and ferocious thought..Poetry is beautiful for its rawness. The rawness of poets like Poe, simultaneously enraptured and terrified by the power of the dark. The rawness of Longfellow and the epic power of his meter (The Seaside and the Fireside). The rawness of dear Lord Byron, sweetly melancholic and aching for all the pain and pride of living..Poetry is unifying. At the core of every human soul pangs the longing for something greater. As a Christian myself, I know this ache in me to be the longing for Heaven. We long to play an integral part in this human drama, and poets from all ages and nations, centuries and backgrounds, they capture and reflect this exquisitely through the language of the life spring. The more poetry I read, the more open I am to different kinds. I’ll read a poem and think to myself, “Oh, how scattered… this is too harsh for my liking.” And then I remember the uniqueness of the soul behind the writing, and the message being sent with a vulnerable spirit, and I see it suddenly in new color. Look into The Poetry Foundation. You just might like what you find.
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What is love No greater man than to give his life And for what a simple sacrifice Love is pure a sweet and true. Will conque all thru and thru Love to me is simply said last beyond the grave, and when were dead. Someday the world will awake and arise and will gaze into our savoirs eyes. No more thru stress and grief and pain. So we can love and pass the grave. all cause of god and his simple gift. Ill love Ill love as pure as it is. Source(s): Donald Quinn DonTheGreat.................
DO YOU LIKE MY POEM????
nice effective words, and i like how you dont make it rhyme since most people think poems need to rhyme to be better. So i would say its really good.
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that poem took me back to the time that i was sick.