Does this story idea about twins sound trippy?
The story idea is this: There are twin sisters, one is Phoebe and the other is Sophie. Phoebe is more business-oriented and likes to watch news on television and her hobbies include needlepoint. She wears her shirts always tucked in. Sophie is more artistic-oriented and likes to go to plays and watch history specials on public television and her hobbies include playing guitar. She wears her shirts untucked. Other than the tucked/untucked difference, they wear the same types of outfits. It is their last day in town before they move out-of-state. There is a party in their favor. Phoebe comes in first. She is wearing a yellow short-sleeved T-shirt tucked into blue jeans. A friend named Ron walks towards her and talks about the news. They carry on a conversation. However, Sophie now enters and she's also wearing a yellow T-shirt tucked into blue jeans. Ron is confused because he now does not know if he was chatting with Phoebe or Sophie. He apologizes to Phoebe (or Sophie) if he mistook her for someone else. She (whoever she is) says it's okay. However, everyone else in the party are confused and wonder which sister is which. They then realize Phoebe and Sophie could have changed their styles so Phoebe went untucked while Sophie went tucked. They now are not sure which sister each had been talking to because they always identified them by their shirts and always "assumed" Phoebe wore tucked-in shirts and Sophie didn't. They feel guilty and do not want to admit they are now confused. Question: does this idea sound like a trippy story? If so (or not), what do you think of it?
Does my story idea sound too much like Harry Potter?
The "realm" behind this door is very dangerous, however. Inside, Asis finds a mysterious weapon that has the ability to reap the magic from other magicians, thus enhancing his own. He uses it to solidify his position of power and maintain order. Years later, upon his death, he splits the weapon into four Fragments and grants one to each of his children. One of them, Mercer, has radically different views from the rest; he believes they should use their power to rise up against the Expires and punish them the way they were (Suspected magicians were burned, executed, experimented on, shamed and forced into hiding, etc) When he won't give up the idea and his siblings find he has been experimenting with dark magic, he is removed from power and exiled from the town. By this point, Incantor is beginning to struggle; the three rulers are only young adults anyways, but Incantor's position is beginning to slip. With the Other Realm stripped of resources and other "safe
How does this story idea sound? A troubled teen-young adult struggling with sexuality and drug problems?
Her age will be 17-22 She will be living on her own, because she has family problems. Her dad isn't around often and her mom is an alcoholic. She has low self esteem and she is not a very happy person, but there is some good in her world. Her best friend, her younger brother Jamie, and music. Music is something that she is passionate about and she is a talented singer. (which she doesnt see) She also likes to paint and write. Her name will be Kadence or Cadence. (which is better?) The person I am basing this off of, her name starts with a K that's why I wanted to use Kadence She is kind, shy, intelligent,creative,dark, unsure, beautiful, sarcastic, artistic,and lonely. I'm thinking she maybe goes through a break-up or something that hurts her and she turns to drugs. Her brother sees her doing it, and he tries it. When he does he ends up in the hospital..which makes her feel terrible because she truly loves her brother. Does that sound good? Boring? Ideas please? This is my first story, so don't be too cruel! haha Thanks in advance :)
Which of these YA story ideas sounds best?:)?
Hi! Which one of these do you like best? And why is it your favorite? 1.Jessamine Clark has always felt like an outsider, being the girl who's parents were killed in a plane crash and were never found. Left alone by her aunt and uncle most nights, she discovers an attic filled with paintings and stories of a land named Phaenalis, a place filled with mythical creatures and landscape you'e only ever dreamed. After learning the she is the heir to the throne in this extraordinary world, she must go on a journey with a band of thieves if she wants to save her kingdom-and the parents she never knew. 2. Bethany Allen is a big girl with a big dream- to star in her own cooking show on the hottest food channel, Yum! When her cooking inspiration, Grandma June, dies unexpectedly, Bethany takes all of her college savings and moves to New York, the home of Yum! TV. After a few weeks in the big apple, Bethany learns that Yum! may actually be Yuck! 3. Jane Cooper has always been classified as a "nerd", and to her that's never going to change. Or so she thinks. Her mom has always moved her around, but when she settles on a job in L.A., Jane is forced to go to Livingston Academy, high up in the Hollywood Hills. On her first day of school, Jane is surprised to find that she's been mistaken for recently missing Jenna Samuel. Soon, she is swept into a world of lies, and goes to great lengths to cover who she is. Jane will also learn that with being Jenna, comes many lies and secrets, and not everybody is who they say they are. Okay, There they are! Thanks! And if you want, you can add feedback:)
Which of these story ideas sounds the best for teenage girls 13-17?
Number One is not the perfect romance story that wasn't what I was aiming for. Adam's family is very complicated and he's living a life he doesn't really want to. Eve is intrigued by him as her own father had a very similar upbringing but as he died when she was only young and her mother isn't always up for talking about it she wants to learn more about this lifestyle. She sees Adam as a way to get to know her father life but ends up getting into something messy and complicated, something that isn't normal and is a little crazy. It presents the question does she love him or is he just something different that's come along that takes her to her past and is it really him who relies on her as. His father has many younger girlfriends, he has a younger half sister who's split between two houses and his mother died when he was very young. She'll meet up with his friends and it'll all be so knew to her, but she's stuck in something she can't get out of. Maybe it'll work out or maybe he'll wo
Does my novel idea sound good/original?
I am a amateur writer wanting to write a fantasy novel but i am not sure if my idea is any good. These are some of my current ideas: _The protagonist rather than being a farm boy with a prophecy is the son of a emperor born and raised in a large empire which war is everyday life. And rather being a positive personality he is a cynic, dark, very objective and a warfare tactician and eventually he become emperor and starts a twisted goal to 'unify' a broken world as one or in other words world conquest for the greater 'good'. _Royals and monarchs such as kings, queens and princess will be mentioned for political reasons so if the protagonist does get married to a princess of another kingdom, its purely for economical and alliance reasons though she will provide moral support for the troubled emperor and she will eventually soften his cold hard heart. (a romance element wouldn't hurt) _The emperors empire is a large powerful and warlike land which uses gunpowder weapons (civil war era rifles) and has access to steam tanks, steam mechs, ironclad battleships, submarines, planes and crank powered machine guns, i won't go far to put automatic weapons in it though. _The empire (haven't found a name for it yet) starts using portals to conquer different worlds and builds a even bigger empire but he stumbles upon a world where most of the story will take place This land is home to humans, elves, dwarfs, orcs and other mythical creatures whom prefer swords and magic over guns and technology. i will rewrite them as i know i can never beat Tolkiens elves. _Well basically in the story the empire does make progress in conquest but eventually he falls in love with the world and when outer world invaders (demons maybe) also arrive on the scene the conquerors (the empire)become the protectors. (sounds cheesy, ill work on that and try yo write it better) _Oh yeah, this theme is dark,gritty,mature and if were ever made into a movie it (if it even gets through to the editor) would be beyond R rated. Well that's all i got for now, tell me what you thing of my idea, be honest and feel free to express your opinion.
Does my story and character sound cliche?
Title doesn't fit the message of this story. The story isn't about her lack of freedom, it's about being victimized by criminals preying on naive, impulsive teenagers to fuel an underground sex trafficking crime organization. So this needs to change. You state that Felicity is impulsive (acts without thinking), yet she's sensible. She clearly didn't act without thinking when she questioned her friend's "friend" or when she called her mother (apparently on a pay phone), to check in. To be impulsive is to not question things...so you might want to rethink this incongruity. As for the rest, you told me virtually nothing about the story other than the main plot line and that's fine. Sounds fine. What would be cliche would be how you executed this story. If you told it like all the other sex trafficking story's through the eyes of the victimized woman...then it is a typical format. I wouldn't call it cliche since it isn't exceedingly overdone but I would say that it's a common format for this story. As for the book blurb, it's too vague in spots and a bit misleading. Word choice needs to be taken into consideration "propositioned with a great deal"... should mention her looking for employment. "Deal" is too vague. And you didn't tell us anything unusual about Felicity. Surely she has an uncharacteristic trait that helps her survive this ordeal? You should mention it in the book blurb. And the final three sentenced should be revised into two because they're overly melodramatic and could be stated in fewer words that pack a larger punch. Otherwise, again, it's fine :)
How can I make my story sound less cheesy?
Find Beta-Reader that will give you an honest opinion, and have them review it. Writing the way they feel about a section as they go through it. Review the answers. DO NOT TRY TO JUSTIFY. Accept that what they felt is what they felt. If you have good people, then their opinions are valid and you need to fix it where they find fault. Are your characters flat? Is the conflict real? Will the readers care about either? (Kathleen and Karen's answers covers some other great points.)
Does this story plot sound intersting or is it cliche?
Well it is hard to come up with original ideas especially when you are borrowing from fairy tales. But your idea is a nice twist. Keep working on your ideas and story.
I’m trying to create a new story. Which idea sounds better?
Maybe something to consider is whether you want to write a mystery novel - which might be what you find with the detective - or whether you want it to be more of a romance, which might be the direction that the perfect person angle would give.So I’d ponder which genre - and which audience - you’re most interested in.