What do you think of my first poem (in the comments)?
Don’t ever ask others about your first things. Don’t try to analyse them. Just write a next one and a next one till prisons and sun bursts turn into carrots and toy cars, and your head is spinning in a candy floss taste of happiness. Your creative child does not need others even most constructive critism! Let it play instead and you will know when you have poems sticking their toungues at you from everywhere that you - just you - are an amazing creative and natural poet.
This is the Poem I heard from the Home Improvement show..?
die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die die It's true, that was from the home inprovement show and Tim Allien was in it and he name was Tim Tayor. His wife name is Jill, his three sons are Brad, Randy, and Mark. His nigbhor's name is Willison. Does this ring any bells? die die die die die diedie die die die die die die die die die die diedie die die die die die die die die die die die I think that it's funny though.
How do you think I could improve this poem?
There are some excellent things in this poem. The imagery is quite nicely done. I like how the title integrates with the poem itself and gives it a very different tone than the words alone convey. It's got a nice iambic feel to it. The rhyme scheme could be improved by creating a more consistent rhyme scheme, like an ABAB, CDCD structure instead of only rhyming every other line. It will wreck a lot of your word choice, and it's certainly not a glaring issue.I would also suggest continuing with the structure you create in your first six lines of opening each line of each stanza with the same words. You establish this pattern in your fist six lines, and then never return to it. You could try to make the iambic meter more consistent. Most of the poem alternates between iambic tetrameter and trimeter, which works just fine, but you have a few lines that don't quite fit the mold. The danger to it is that it gets a little sing-songy, but there's certainly plenty of exemplary poetry through the ages that does. Again, love the content, love the imagery. Nice work.
Can you help me improve this?
the dumb kind as my eyes get lost in the clouds up high i think to myself 'oh why, oh why'? why must this be happening to me? why is everyone blind when i can see? i live in a world of ignorance where no-one ever gives me a chance they think i'm a useless waste of space just because i go at my own pace. why must i hide the talents i possess? just so someone else can get the best? i'm mute, but talking is not that great, it's just one way to communicate. sometimes i want to be like a hawk, i'd fly away when people gawk. they see the imperfections in me, it's the talents they refuse to see. i can write and play sonorous music, i was born with paint on my cheek, can deftly run as fast as a cheetah, and a game of chess? sure i'll beat ya. but i am not as social as others, i can't be- i'm 'warned' against by mothers. they think i have something contagious, to my problems they are oblivious. they don't let children open their minds, but, instead let them be the dumb kind.
Once I've written a poem, what are the best ways to improve on it?
Alright, the thing with a poem is that you only have so many words to convey your message, so you need to do as much as possible to make sure every single word you say delivers your theme, or sets a mood you want.Lets take this poem for instance:Nature's first green is gold,Her hardest hue to hold.Her early leaf's a flower;But only so an hour.Then leaf subsides to leaf.So Eden sank to grief,So dawn goes down to day.Nothing gold can stay.Notice how he said, first green. This shows that he (Robert Frost) wants to tell something in an order of events. A story that goes over time.“Her hardest hue to hold” conveys that whatever gold represents in the poem ends in a short amount of time.“Her leafs an early flower” shows beauty, because a flower is something we associate with that, and it tells us that it will end with early.“But only so an hour” once again shows that it will all end eventually.“Then leaf subsides to leaf” is the start of the ending process, and he goes with the word subside because it is a negative connotation as the gold disappears.“So Eden sank to grief.” This one shows something beautiful (Eden) dying just like the gold.“Dawn goes down to day” shows the conclusion as the day ends.“Nothing gold can stay” is the meaningful conclusion.That's all I can really say. After that, just make sure you write to the best of your abilily.
'Traces' will you give me some improvement advice?
How does one suggest improvements to something that is from the future? My language is ancient and I pray that I have been able express myself with this one (title borrowed from your dictionary): BLENDERNATION A terzanelle We cross this river grey and blue A dark storm loading up the rills, with a refuting ardent brew the skies with murk are veiled and filled the upland skies drop anxious stares A dark storm loading up the rills I stare defiance with deep pray’rs Whilst list’ning to the great earth stir The upland skies drop anxious stares I offer frankincense and myrrh A seeker young in some old church Whilst list’ning to the great earth stir I yield to the plan, yield my search A mayhem wind, of needle brine A seeker young in some old church A mantra, witchy bread and wine My head, my soul inside this grave A mayhem wind of needle brine Our cerule souls escape our caves We cross this river grey and blue My head, my soul inside this grave We cross this river grey and blue.
What are the ways for improving your poem writing skills?
Firstly I admit that I’m a learner. So what I share is only my experience and realization.If you want to improve your poem writing skill that means you have already started writing poems.So you are not new. I think you have a little idea.Now■ Firstly read read and read as much poems as possible.■ Be a good observer and perceive the things around.■ Don’t get too much imaginary. Rather seek your mind what comes truely.■ Try to know the rhetorics or figure of speeches as much as you can.■ Try knowing prosody if you want to write rhyming poems.■ Don’t overthink. Just think differently.■ Have a look how the good poems start and get into a flow.■ Don’t ever memorize good poems of others. Because while you try to write your own, those words will unnecessarily come and block your creative thinking.■ Have some readers (from your friends or may be your parents or sister/brother) around you who would easily praise your poems. It’ll give you more writing inspiration as well as self confidence to write more.■ Don’t compare your poems with others. Just wtite to your heart’s content and self satisfaction.■ Don’t ever dream of becoming recognized. It would badly affect you with needless pressure of expectation.■ Enjoy what you see or what you get through in your life. You’ll be more widened and matured day by day.■ And last but not the least Don’t ever give up writing poems.Thanks for reading. ☺